I something You

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K&D
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I something You

Post by K&D » June 28th, 2009, 11:40 pm

I something you
It started with a piercing on a smile.
I hope your listening next time we lie
And I try to push through “I love you”
Between kisses and lost pauses in your eyes.

I something you
From your fingers to your legs
Every touch is like its own date
And I want more time to get to know
You and verbilize what already doesn’t
Need to be said.

I something you
There are few like you that will see
All that you so easily squeeze out of me
I’m a control freak released by being
Between you, below you and at
Your will.

I something you
Ellen you push the sun into night
Ellen you race my heart when your
Finger brushes against mine
With all your mite you kiss me
In this, your aura orange moonlight.

I something you,
I want to give you everything I’ve got
Be I left with sore lips, shorten breath
or emotional dependence, the only true power
for open souls hell bent on peak experience
Blah!

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Post by Doreen Peri » June 29th, 2009, 9:21 am

Nice rhythm and rhyme and sentiment, KD!

I enjoyed this.

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Post by mtmynd » June 29th, 2009, 11:46 am

sounds like love, K&D... real, unabashed, open and freely-felt love.

well done!
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Post by SmileGRL » June 29th, 2009, 4:51 pm

i like the idea of someone's aura being orange moonlight...

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Post by hester_prynne » June 30th, 2009, 9:43 pm

"..verbalize what already doesn't need to be said"....
one of many stellar lines in this fabulous love poem.
Wow.
H 8)
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Post by justwalt » July 1st, 2009, 2:47 pm

There are few like you that will see
All that you so easily squeeze out of me...
love this line...

the language of love is beyond mere words...
seems to be a multi-dimensional kinda-inner-something
that doesn't follow any rules...
yeah, that must be it...keep it coming K&D

walt

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Post by Perdida » July 7th, 2009, 8:34 am

I something you
Ellen you push the sun into night
Ellen you race my heart when your
Finger brushes against mine
With all your mite you kiss me
In this, your aura orange moonlight.
especially loved these lines and the orange moonlight..... i saw candles, lots of candles *smiles*
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