Free-born Lady Abandoned

[SadLuckDame]

It's gonna be alright, Baby.
I'll be a twister at the side
show bar--slim boots skimming
the mini go-go.

I'll tattoo my number on the inside
thigh. A shimmy, a shake, and the shoo
shoo. New arrivals can look it up
shoving money on the boot ties.

Darlin', don't you worry
I could pop an appli-vacation
in over at the corner dine.
Scoop up the gossip between
hot dogs and dying
local Jimmy-Joes.

Write it in an on-line blog,
a column, if business slows
around my shirt front
on the curve of Maple
and Ivory.

I feel fine, though you left.
Bagged up your pot to sell
on the whim,
passing it through the window
to a junked up doe-
eyed doll.

We parted lips,
pressed to trick the 5-0 into seeing
a rendezvous.

The dog's a bit restless
at the door.
I guess he knows.
I bought him a new spiked collar,
looks real good too,
but he whines.

If the phone rings, I refuse to answer,
won't get caught up in conversation
'bout how it happened.
No use in anybody nosing.
I asked for this, you know.

Sorry, I didn't treat you right,
Hell, I know it’s selfish.

Oh! maybe I'll try out
ballroom dancing, or an actress
over at the boulevard theater.
Practice my P’s and Q’s,
flirted curtsy, a little patty peek-
show and then a wide smile.

I’ll be by on Saturday
for the $450. Take care.

Sincerely,

Allison


*another non new piece. I've been to tired to burst a new one out.

[Doreen Peri]

I really love this! Very unique and cool...!

[SadLuckDame]

Thanks Doreen. I did get the job too.

[Doreen Peri]

Oh great! That's good!

I like this because it's a story and you have to read between the lined to try to figure out exactly what was going on. I read a relationship break up... and a strong woman making the right decision to move on. I also read that it wasn't easy.

I particularly liked this bit

Bagged up your pot to sell
on the whim,
passing it through the window
to a junked up doe-
eyed doll.

Love the phrasing.

[SadLuckDame]

I know, the pot was in the keyboards, under them, it was a nasty clean up. The doe never asked what the fuzz was. I bought a pair of pretty shoes to interview with. I don't know, was just fun.

[Arcadia]

nice to meet you SadLuckDame!! (aunque you sound very familiar...!!) enjoying how your writing is flowing!!

[hester_prynne]

Or maybe i'll just write a fantastic poem.....
Yeah. I dig it sister.
H

[Perdida]

Luv yur style!

[goldenmyst]

You have the lingo and the narrative just right. This sounds so authentic. And the breakup storyline is just perfect. I enjoyed this one as much as Bukowski. Splendid.

John

[SadLuckDame]

Sorry I'm late for the date. Really glad you liked this. Nice to meet you too sweet Arcadia. Thanks much John, oh Bukowski--he had done it right, thanks Perdida, Dear Hester, too

[keithalanhamilton]

Sorry, I didn't treat you right,
Hell, I know it’s selfish.

[Lightning Rod]

nice melt of personality