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But Still
Posted: November 5th, 2009, 1:35 am
by K&D
your probably not but still
but still I will wait for a maybe or sometime
or I don’t know.
Your niceities send me to hostility
I will take advantage so take care sweetness
Oh I don’t know
Ill go along for the ride but really
Take me anywhere but home
Its nothing unknown
And yet I’m here still.
So still the air would be between
Us you must know.
Posted: November 5th, 2009, 2:41 am
by judih
overt is so last year
the simmering maybes of your piece
are so very present moment
well written piece K&D
Posted: November 5th, 2009, 9:39 am
by saw
I like the doubt in this, with it's well-crafted line breaks.......trying to untangle the hopelessly entwined ....
Posted: November 5th, 2009, 10:34 pm
by Barry
Everybody thinks they know, don't they? It's sooo rich.
Nice work here.
Peace,
Barry
Posted: November 5th, 2009, 11:43 pm
by SadLuckDame
I, too, likes that maybes. Good like this.
Posted: November 8th, 2009, 10:39 pm
by goldenmyst
Cool poem K&D.
Your niceities send me to hostility
I will take advantage so take care sweetness
Fantastic lines!
John
Posted: November 10th, 2009, 3:41 pm
by Perdida
Your niceities send me to hostility
Argh i know what you mean here, sighs.
Take me anywhere but home
looove that
Nice to read you again, it has been a while. I've been looking out for you too
m
Re: But Still
Posted: November 10th, 2009, 5:26 pm
by mb
K&D wrote:
Your niceities send me to hostility
I will take advantage so take care sweetness
Oh I don’t know
I really dig the apparent juxtapositions here that really aren't, underneath it all. I love the light touch.
-mb
Posted: November 10th, 2009, 7:38 pm
by Lightning Rod
yes, simple and full of doubt
Posted: November 10th, 2009, 7:41 pm
by pjbuk2
I love it, monologuesque.
Posted: November 10th, 2009, 11:08 pm
by hester_prynne
"but still I will wait for a maybe or so"
Great line.
Really dug the poem.
H
