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the trumpet can only blow so far
Posted: November 9th, 2009, 3:23 am
by Perdida
it was during the time of my last cigarette
when you performed your songs for me
and let your dark horses bolt
that’s when you dream caught me
and tangled me into a baton-twirling bimbette
for your hip-hop acrobatics
but the vinyl can only take so much rubbin babe
and the trumpet can only blow so far
it’s the drum that keeps on beating
and the bitching always follows suit
like wings that scatter feathers
like an extravagant opus
with the makeup of strings
and those golden rings
that sit like kings and queens
on your fiddly fingers
they match your eyes
shifting always shifting
like a loosely fitted petticoat
that at the end of the day
crumples into a heap
like a tired old woman
onto the floor.
Posted: November 9th, 2009, 12:12 pm
by goldenmyst
I dig your beat. This is hip to the square of ten. Most excellent.
John
Posted: November 9th, 2009, 12:34 pm
by mtmynd
caught!
you expressed it
like you felt it
and that is how
it drives its depth
deep into the soul
thx, perdida... me gusta!
Posted: November 9th, 2009, 8:34 pm
by mb
s'cool...
Posted: November 10th, 2009, 1:43 am
by K&D
sweet! I've been looking for you perdida.
and I haven't been dissapointed, as usual your work seems to fit in so perfectly with how i see things, and things that are happening to me at the moment.
awesome writting, as always i love your stuff!
Posted: November 10th, 2009, 3:59 pm
by Perdida
John, thank you, so happy you dug it ( did i say that right?)
mtmynd...NO, muchas gracias!
Hey mb, thanks for the "cool"
K&D, thank you! s'bout time you got yurself back here. It's been a pleasure reading you.
Thanks all
m

Posted: November 10th, 2009, 11:18 pm
by hester_prynne
"shifting always shifting
like a loosely fitted petticoat"
I love that.
Poem really vibrates emotion.
Really good read
H

Posted: November 13th, 2009, 6:39 am
by Perdida
hester, thank you kindly ma'am.

Posted: November 13th, 2009, 11:31 am
by the mingo
Damn ! Ya put me in a tight spot. Damn ! And you're so far away. Damn ! Guess all I can do now is turn into a coyote and go hug a rattlesnake. Grrrr! Grrrr! Ya put the crunch in my toast this morning, I'll tell ya that. When I'm done with my snake hug I'm gonna go gnaw on a stone for awhile.
Posted: November 21st, 2009, 6:50 pm
by Perdida
Mr Mingo, smiling BIG. Love your reply, thank you!

Posted: November 21st, 2009, 8:40 pm
by constantine
you are very good, you know. always enjoy your work - always can feel it. you sort of get to know a person through their poetry in a different way than face to face. i know that sounds mundane, but it's more than that. it's like the windows to the soul thing. i trust you through your poetry.
Posted: November 21st, 2009, 8:49 pm
by Doreen Peri
maree..... fabulous! It's music.... great images and cadence/meter/sounds ... love it!
it does exactly what poetry should do
Posted: November 21st, 2009, 9:03 pm
by SadLuckDame
What a treat this is, that ending came out so fabulously banging, too.