2 new things

[Artguy]

This Is

Nature of that
Buddha dharma
Noble
Suffering Lama

On a work a day
On snow walk
Bleak
To work a talk

Leafless limbs
Naked urban
Trees
Ragged man

Clinging to
Ignorant desire
Have
Human dire

Breaking circle
Clearing in the wood
Samsara
There I stood

To the 8 fold path
Hinayana liberation
Nirvana
No end or creation

This is
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The Same

That desolation
That walk a day
Work a day
Pay day

Out into the bleak
Morning grey
Soldiering
Into foxhole
Mortgage

Pay to death
Insured life
Death and taxed
To death
Again

Unchosen life
Born into suffering
Unto an ism
This One
That one

End of month
Payment
End of life
Debt

Vote in election
Democracy
Education for?
Again
Pay to death

[beat_fan]

Both of these have good images, but the second one has some incongruities, (like "suffering llama"), and the line "Buddha Dharma" is confusing, since dharma is the hindu concept of one's natural place, and Buddha was a religious figure.
The second one is easier to follower: perceptions of a moment's varied thoughts is what I got, thought I might be wrong. But the cliché about democracy and taxes don't lend themselves well, thye could be better-phrased.[/quote]

[Artguy]

Buddhism is a western term and is not correct the Buddha Dharma is the correct translation of the the path of the Buddha.........And Suffering Lama is an expression of the suffering experienced by all experiencing samsara even the enlightened...........

[beat_fan]

Whoops, I guess I learned something new, and that's okay.
However, you might want to reconsider using them, b/c they sound goofy to those like myself with only a cursory knowledge of Buddhism, and they would simply be clichés to those who do know the terms.
Thank you for enlightening me, and I was only attempting to be constructive.

[hester_prynne]

Hey Artguy!
Ease on down,
ease on down,
off the grid.

Out of the headlock.
Some one else's dream.

not ours.
cake ain't freedom.

nice work.

H

[Artguy]

My apologies ...did not mean to offend or come off quite soooo defencively...............thanks for setting me straight Hester................

[dadio]

Both well said. Enjoyed.