Page 1 of 1

children should be seen and not heard

Posted: January 11th, 2005, 9:13 pm
by ellipsis
i learned to talk at some
foggy, indescernible age,
when the colors fell in syllables
to their deaths in punctuation,
and the skyline heaved a sigh
and became an ellipsis

hanging, waiting for the time
to learn to breathe to
wait
to hurry blurs along
the notes we weave to speak.

she was waiting, resting her lips
on cobblestone crumble, counting
out her notes before struggling to speak;
i pleaded with my eyes, but
she laughed until i had nothing

and i remembered
that when i learned to speak, i
penned an instruction booklet
so i could learn to sing; the notes
were indiscernible, but
the tiptoe of my pen
brushed the curl of my lips, and
i learned to speak in silence.

Posted: January 11th, 2005, 10:02 pm
by hester_prynne
"when the colors fell in syllables to their deaths in punctuation,..."

I really dig this line, not to mention this poem. It's beautifully descriptive, very clear at the same time, almost visual. It really works.

Nice one ellipsis...
H

Posted: January 11th, 2005, 10:07 pm
by Lightning Rod
good one, lips

it's great to see you here

angel from montgomery

Posted: January 11th, 2005, 10:10 pm
by ellipsis
hey, thanks, you two. i'm trying to start writing again, and your responses are nice to read.

hey hest! did you get my mail? i'm gonna be in your area this weekend....

Posted: January 11th, 2005, 10:13 pm
by hester_prynne
You are?! In Astoria? I didn't get any mail...or uh, at least I didn't see anything...
what up girl?
Damn, I'd love to see you!

H

Posted: January 11th, 2005, 10:19 pm
by ellipsis
not exactly in astoria...

i'm going to arrive in seattle this saturday, meet with miss piph, and sightsee with her all day sunday before i have to grab a bus headed north on sunday afternoon around 4:30.

i know this is pretty short notice, but if you wanted to visit seattle, it would be great to see you.

Posted: January 11th, 2005, 11:03 pm
by hester_prynne
Geez! That is a short trip. I'd love to come see you while your up in my ol hometown, and I would too, but my pony is running pretty badly and I don't think it would make the trip. I think it's too short notice to get anyone interested in goin up with me too....damn.
I wish you could stick around longer.....or get piph to bring you on down for a visit here....but there ain't much time.

BUMMER!

h

Posted: January 12th, 2005, 4:05 am
by ellipsis
aww hest... i've already bought my ticket, which is nonrefundable. but i'm sure i'll return to your area. i'd love to explore oregon. actually, i'm potentially moving there.

i'll see you.

Posted: January 12th, 2005, 9:17 am
by knip
have fun lips...and nice to hear from you