I'll continue to burn

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I'll continue to burn

Post by hester_prynne » February 8th, 2010, 2:00 am

According to status quo,
I'm the loser.

Running after songs to sing,
neath primal moonlit spotlights,

moved by the millions of sadnesses
alive in hungry dark places.

I have a light to shine there,
and it blazes despite your will.

Disguised as controlled fire,
in a regulated campsite,

I'll continue to burn,
you'll complain about the heat.
"I am a victim of society, and, an entertainer"........DW

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Post by judih » February 8th, 2010, 2:32 am

love the phrasing
the gut talk
the lines:
moved by the millions of sadnesses
alive in hungry dark places.
love!

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Post by panta rhei » February 8th, 2010, 9:49 am

love this:

"Running after songs to sing,
neath primal moonlit spotlights,

moved by the millions of sadnesses
alive in hungry dark places"

strong poem, hest.

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Post by sweetwater » February 8th, 2010, 11:30 am

yeah same here! moved by it ...

nice one!

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Post by constantine » February 9th, 2010, 2:22 pm

yes, burn. burn it right in the belly of the beast.

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Post by mnaz » February 9th, 2010, 2:38 pm

smoldering steady, and "catch a fire," as Marley said. nice.


much more metaphoric/positive/resolute than my blunt scream back in 2006..

...'where is the fire in my belly, when false prophets multiply as vermin,
when machines would crush our spirit? when do we lay down flat?
when will faint stirrings of anger bring the people alive? i look for vital signs.'

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Post by Doreen Peri » February 10th, 2010, 2:37 pm

Disguised as controlled fire,
in a regulated campsite,

I'll continue to burn,
you'll complain about the heat.
brilliant!

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Post by GodModule » February 16th, 2010, 3:55 am

I love the flow of this. I could read this a thousand times just to hear the the rhythm of the words. :)
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