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A Plate of Rainwater

Posted: February 28th, 2010, 4:40 pm
by theirishsea
When there’s nothing
A plate of rainwater is easy to get

Yes, you could go for days
A dog with a tongue like a tail
Wagging and lapping up
The condensing steam off somebody else’s coffee

Your eyes could get that far, far away look
A car with luggage piled in the back seat

The one white shirt, loosely draped tie
On a wire hanger
hung on the hook

you hope your jive sells
your life
To the first corporation
Available

What have you done?
Lately?

You have lived on the street
Bushy eyebrows, beard like a carwash brush
Attitude like a trash-compacter

You are given a plate of rainwater
Told to sit and vote Republican
water comes from the sky
it trickles down

Posted: February 28th, 2010, 11:38 pm
by judih
the lucky ones get a box
but wire-hangers know how to find a plate
vote as they may

theirishsea - this is a brilliant portrait, perfectly etched

Posted: February 28th, 2010, 11:56 pm
by Doreen Peri
Fabulous piece, Dan! Really fine work! I love it!

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(note typo, last stanza .. "your are given" vs "you are given")

Posted: March 1st, 2010, 12:10 am
by theirishsea
Fixed typo. Thanks Doreen.

Posted: March 1st, 2010, 1:16 pm
by mnaz
yes, good write. yes, the trickle-down theory.

I can see how the concept is promising in theory. but in practice, how much "trickles down?" and how far must we bankrupt the treasury? and how much of the rampant consumer-driven economy was financed on credit (credit which has largely dried up)?

sometimes I wish the government hadn't had its head up its complacent ass at so many levels in various endeavors over the years, leaving it ripe for reagan's "revolution" and its continuing legacy and mindset.

Posted: March 2nd, 2010, 1:42 am
by hester_prynne
Fantastic piece of work here,
a diverse self portrait
more than that, it evokes a feeling of strength trickling from within.
Powerful and light.
H 8)

Posted: March 2nd, 2010, 8:57 pm
by stilltrucking
yes powerful and light
brilliant

Posted: March 4th, 2010, 11:55 pm
by mb
there's a bleakness to this piece that stands out, and the mercy given is no mercy at all, methinks. well done.

-mb