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gorilla wake at brookline zoo

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 5:25 am
by mindbum
gorilla wake at brookline zoo

the head lady gorilla
babs, matriarch
of the zoo tribe
was euthanised
with incurable kidneys.

keepers laid her out.
mother, daughters, sons and cousins,
caressed farewell.

the silverback, alone,
did not attend.

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 2:59 pm
by beat_fan
This is interesting. You might want to re-consider the title, though; I thought it was going to be a comedic piece.

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 3:14 pm
by judih
i love it
and loved the fact that the wake awoke within me after i read the poem


judih

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 3:25 pm
by perezoso
I sorta dug it tho a bowerbrd pecking on Bab's stinking flesh might have improved it

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 3:29 pm
by e_dog
i like this.

nice and subtle, no room for nor any need for birds picking stinking flesh.

maybe change title to

"a wake at brookline zoo"

or something.

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 3:36 pm
by perezoso
subtle? I think not. It's better than most of the other squeaks on here---yet it's more 60's anthropomorphism 101

the world needs poets about as much as it needs astrologers--which is to say, it doesn't...and I suspect Marx & Lenin would agree

if you see Shakespeare (or, say, Updike or Bobby Dylan) on the street, mug him

:lol: :twisted: :P :twisted: :D :P :x :evil: :twisted:

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 3:43 pm
by judih
no perezoso
shakespeare, he's in the alley

that's buddha on the road
& he warned us we'd have to kill him

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 3:45 pm
by perezoso
Read some Shakespeare carefully and you discover he's just another sentimental Tory liberal--with superb rhetoric skills, though not so great in logic

As He tries to shoot the king, the Poet shoots himself in his foot

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 4:32 pm
by hester_prynne
the buddha attended without really attending.


M.B., this beats going to church alright.
Nice one

H 8)

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 4:39 pm
by perezoso
Hester in Sunday School? Yikes. Though you might get some decent investment tips there......

I tend to frequent Our Lady of Potassium Chlorate, but the sermons tend to be rather, uh, explosive...heh heh....The Right Reverend Ted Kaczynski presiding

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 4:46 pm
by hester_prynne
Silverback Sunday School.

Studio eight sunday school.

Where Jane Austen mysteriously slips in and out from prison with bumper sticker slogan ideas.

Good Sunday Morning to you Pere.
Nice to see you.
H

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 4:52 pm
by perezoso
You know that I have always admired your skill in bumper sticker writing, Hester! Bumper sticker writing ( also known as modern poetry) comes in handy when people can't put together any creative ideas or find some evidence for their belief systems .....

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 5:00 pm
by hester_prynne
belief relief,
oh lordy,
i'm runnin shorty
on belief relief.

Whirled peas,
visualize ballard,
honk
if you believe
in jesus,
horn broken
watch for finger,
she who laughs, lasts,
real men
don't do violence,
caution:
driver singing,
bumpersticker
scat

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 5:11 pm
by perezoso
"America: Love it or Fly a 707 into it"

"Crack Powered!"

"Caution: Armed and Dangerous Psychotic at Wheel"

Gods, Guts, and Morning Glory seeds

"This Car stops at Northern Mexican Bordelloes"

"Stoned Samaritan"

"Real Men Fuck Jesus"

"Think orally, act anally"

"Don't blame me, I voted for Zippy"

Posted: January 16th, 2005, 5:38 pm
by Axanderdeath
The line that worries me is
love america or fly a 707 in to it. I don't think the divsion is that clear, but i think it was sarcasim?