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something i've been working on.....

Posted: July 24th, 2010, 7:56 am
by YABYUM
its no where near complete....just thought i'd see what you thought so far....

i have without personal inner doubt destroyed one soul or two maybe more as much as thirty three divided by the ones i passed whom i with love allowed a slow dissolve of what i once displayed as me

its a long road behind
me
so easy now to see
its no longer than
individual moment memories
no words....but these

Positioned at an early age to fall in love with Jehovah
To write that word to paint each evil stroke
Holy nova
inspiration
see it live inside the cellar inside me
See it cry inside the seller inside me

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Posted: July 24th, 2010, 9:50 am
by YABYUM
i have without personal inner doubt destroyed one soul or two maybe more as much as thirty three divided by the ones i passed whom i with love allowed a slow dissolve of what i once displayed as me

its a long road behind
me
so easy now to see
its no longer than
individual moment memories
no words....but these

Positioned at an early age to fall in love with Jehovah
To write that word to paint each evil stroke
Holy nova
inspiration
see it live inside the cellar inside me
See it cry inside the seller inside me

I have a daughter task screeching love in decibels of come find me dada I have eyes like yours we’re hiding
Through these sounds I meet her eyes gaze a thought compromise blue is looking at me multiplying me

its a long road behind
me
so easy now to see
its no longer than
individual moment memories
no words....but these

Posted: July 24th, 2010, 10:15 am
by WIREMAN
it is indeed a very very very long road....we humans be resilient creatures....hell sometimes i can't even remember my 1st wife's name....now was it ann or anne?????

Re: something i've been working on.....

Posted: September 1st, 2010, 8:28 pm
by joel
YABYUM--

I finished reading these with groans inside too deep for words, at the same time relating and not understanding, envying and (in a nonjudgmental way (or at least as much as that is possible)) pitying. I don't know for whom. Great stuff; thanks.

Re: something i've been working on.....

Posted: September 2nd, 2010, 2:06 pm
by justwalt
like the theme so far,
sounds like a song

if it fits... how 'bout (invisible moment memories) or divisible...

just seems to be too many syllables in individual