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driveby finger

Posted: September 25th, 2010, 3:38 pm
by emel.scott
What vicious freedom these four wheels
that put the lie to my good grace.
It serves ill temper up to deal,
each card a smarmy, angry face.

I set my stinger in his eye,
then gun it towards a winding route.
Expletives trail off passers-by
as he may be in hot pursuit.

Accelerator under foot,
deposit of my displaced stress.
Depressing, it reveals a root
of cowardice, I must confess.

Re: driveby finger

Posted: September 25th, 2010, 5:06 pm
by stilltrucking
your intent seems pretty clear to me
but I have heard poets say the meaning lies between the poet and the reader

the mystery is how poetry reveals hard truths.

vicious freedom
hell of a line.
I think you just meme'd me

Re: driveby finger

Posted: September 26th, 2010, 11:06 am
by constantine
easy to be outspoken when encased in a ton of metal.

Re: driveby finger

Posted: September 26th, 2010, 3:37 pm
by emel.scott
yeah, and I haven't even gotten to the nose picking part yet :)

Re: driveby finger

Posted: September 26th, 2010, 7:15 pm
by Arcadia
my head feels like that, sometimes! :shock: :lol: gracias for the poem!! :)

Re: driveby finger

Posted: September 26th, 2010, 10:12 pm
by hester_prynne

Re: driveby finger

Posted: September 27th, 2010, 1:00 pm
by joel
emel.scott wrote:deposit of my displaced stress.
Depressing, it reveals a root
of cowardice ... .
I really like the flow of thoughts and sounds in this all, really here: [er, um, above]