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old woman
Posted: October 2nd, 2010, 2:26 am
by creativesoul
i wake up and smell the aroma of my juices
flowing under the fool moon and saturating me in nectar
i used to find pleasure in contact with a man
that last one couldnt hold a matriarcal woman
comfort and control
dinner on a tray
somehow i found myself whacked on anti depressants
trying to make sense of his abuse
trying to be lovable
willing to turn into a prezel for love
my friend once said to me
"i would sell myself for love"
it was all true
but i found love in odd places
my spirituality saved me
when i didnt think i deserved it
my scents are calling someone
icant see his face
Re: old woman
Posted: October 2nd, 2010, 8:49 pm
by mudshark
nice flow. and i like the selection of words. compressin the intensity, making a long story with few means. anti depressant. odd places. dinner on a tray. splendid! I did wonder about this, though:
when i didnt think i deserved it
my scents are calling someone...
writing error?
the scents...
If you're driving into town with a dark cloud above you
Dial in the number who's bound to love you
If you're lying on the beach with the transistor going
Kick off the sandflies honey the love's still flowing
If your head says forget it but your heart's still smoking
Call me at the station the lines are open
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=A4pvjgA3 ... re=related
Re: old woman
Posted: October 3rd, 2010, 10:09 pm
by Arcadia
nice flow, indeed...!!!!!
like the drunk-like beggining:
i wake up and smell the aroma of my juices
flowing under the fool moon and saturating me in nectar
Re: old woman
Posted: October 5th, 2010, 6:26 pm
by tinkerjack
If I am ever reborn as a woman
I pray it will be as a very old one
Toothless with withered breasts
so that no man would look at me twice
You have a gift CS, you are truly a creative soul, thanks for the inspiration for my strange reply above. I am probably the worse kind of Jew. I am an ignorant child about the religion but I have heard that in the Talmud there is a prayer that goes something like this:
A man says, "Thank You for not making me a woman." A man is grateful for what he is not. Because he can't make a positive statement, he can't say, Thank You for what I am. He's never sure he is anything.
A woman says, "Thank You for making me as You want me to be." A woman can make a positive statement about herself, because she knows that she is. She is grateful for what she is.
http://www.chabad.org/library/article_c ... -Woman.htm
sincerely
thank you for the private message. Sorry to take so long in replying. When you spoke of power I suppose you meant that power that flows between a man and a woman?