The Waiter

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jim turner
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The Waiter

Post by jim turner » December 12th, 2010, 1:43 pm

Forty, once.
Twice that now, and more.
Waiting.

Waiting all those years
in Abbott’s Flatland,
seasons without salt,
no hill to climb,
no valley on its other side.

I shouldn’t have waited.
I should’ve lived
till I was forty.

Jim 4/15/2009

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dadio
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Re: The Waiter

Post by dadio » December 12th, 2010, 5:11 pm

I sense Philip Larkin's sentiments here. Mine too at times. But I do like the honesty of this poem, Jim, and its set out.

happytrails
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Re: The Waiter

Post by happytrails » December 13th, 2010, 9:49 am

Very good. I don't believe for a minute that you have any wasted years behind you, but a good poem about someone who might have some wasted years.

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