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Oh, you're sorry you hurt me....?
Posted: January 17th, 2011, 7:45 pm
by no1special
Oh, you're sorry you hurt me
you’re such a coward
you come over here and fuck me
why now
you freely confess to this mess
showered
then left
why can’t you face this
it’s too late to erase it
it’s easier for you to give-up and quit
for too many years
I’ve faced this alone
it wasn’t my fault
on my heart
this assault
for no other reason
than
you’re a loser
a user
an abuser
I sit here alone in agony
for the things you have done to me
you have no remorse
instead you force
on me
your rage
your guilt
embarrassment
you victimize with your lies
womanize
what an ability
hiding from the truth
the agility
dodging responsibility
ignoring reality
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Re: Oh, you're sorry you hurt me....?
Posted: January 18th, 2011, 9:33 am
by dadio
Powerful poem & theme.
Re: Oh, you're sorry you hurt me....?
Posted: January 18th, 2011, 11:23 am
by weepingwillow
I love what you have done here. What a way to narrow in on this, so powerful with such beauty in it.
Re: Oh, you're sorry you hurt me....?
Posted: January 18th, 2011, 9:36 pm
by .Lucy.
Great poem!! I can completely relate, it's as though you've written my life story...crazy...
Re: Oh, you're sorry you hurt me....?
Posted: January 19th, 2011, 10:01 am
by saw
a rap of painful explanation with touches of rhyme that do not minimize the hurt that is clear......well done
Re: Oh, you're sorry you hurt me....?
Posted: January 19th, 2011, 12:55 pm
by creativesoul
face what?
for me this speaks of internal struggle that seems
one sided
perhaps it would be interesting to share a shadow
about what happened?
Re: Oh, you're sorry you hurt me....?
Posted: January 19th, 2011, 6:34 pm
by Doreen Peri
Re: Oh, you're sorry you hurt me....?
Posted: January 19th, 2011, 7:09 pm
by stilltrucking
You're The One
Nature gives us shapeless shapes
Clouds and waves and flame
But human expectation
Is that love remains the same
I can see that, well done poem no1
Re: Oh, you're sorry you hurt me....?
Posted: January 19th, 2011, 7:26 pm
by Doreen Peri
One of my favorite Paul Simon songs .... and CDs. The whole CD is fabulous.
About the poem....
Sorry to hear you've been hurt. We all get hurt. Love is painful. Seems like always. Always has been for me anyway. Pain and joy go hand in hand. Take care!
You're the one
You broke my heart
You made me cry
You're the one
You broke my heart
You made me cry
You're the one
You broke my heart
You made me cry
You're the one
But when I hear it from the other side
It's a completely different song
I'm the one who made you cry
And I'm the one who's wrong
In my dream you spoke to me
And you said
Chorus:
You're the one
You broke my heart
You made me cry
You're the one
You broke my heart
You made me cry
You're the one
You broke my heart
You made me cry
You're the one
Nature gives us shapeless shapes
Clouds and waves and flame
But human expectation
Is that love remains the same
And when it doesn't
We point our fingers
And blame blame blame
Re: Oh, you're sorry you hurt me....?
Posted: January 19th, 2011, 7:32 pm
by stilltrucking
Re: Do you prefer writing poetry? Posted: Thu Jan 13, 2011 12:27 pm
I'm still amazed when I discover what some readers take away from reading my work. You can know what you mean to say but you can't know what baggage your reader is bringing with him...
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Lrod
Re: Oh, you're sorry you hurt me....?
Posted: January 19th, 2011, 7:38 pm
by Doreen Peri
He's right. Deconstructionism. A good poem means different things to different readers, in my opinion.