there ain't nobody comin' over here tonight

[saw]

just false hope in all its diaphanous glory
gliding on air in super-duper slow motion
eyes locked on my face in the steamy mirror
what does it mean in this world of endless
variety, your body a vessel for form and function
externalized, perfected in moonlit expressionism
with ultra-linear stylization, impressionistic glow
cubist, classical, all there just behind the sheer
curtain of lace that hides your true intentions
but of course, you don't even know me

[Hollweg]

The title to a poem is so key to its effect. I have the impression that the poet is viewing his own naked image in the mirror and speaking to the stranger he there sees.

[dadio]

Classic poem as far as I am concerned.

[hester_prynne]

Ah. This was so nice to come home to.
Fabulous read, each time!
Bravo
H

[Doreen Peri]

Love it.. you have a strong handle on language and sound. As always....

[saw]

thanx everyone, It's great to be able to get feedback from my colleagues...

without it, writing would be such a lonely venture........thanx again

[judih]

i thought i knew you, till i started to dwell on 'super-duper' - a huge surprise lies in that phrase!

[creativesoul]

i know you
because you
are like me
describing surroundings and feelings. and being as alive as possible
akwardly
i enjoy what you say
even when you strike at the core of what i think often looking in the mirror
and all the people i have been
had to be
now renounced
old ghosts of who i was
but if you were in kauai
i would wanna come over

[creativesoul]

or a really fucked up hotel