AAAAHHHH!!!!

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Night Writer
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AAAAHHHH!!!!

Post by Night Writer » January 30th, 2011, 9:10 pm

I hate you for
Checking the fluids in my car
to make sure it was safe to drive

I hate you for
Turning the lights out
to lower the electricity

I hate you for
Making sure the door was locked before
bed to make sure we'd be unharmed

I hate you for
Setting the coffee the night before
so it was ready for me to go to work

I hate you for
Reading poetry to me in the graveyard
bringing dead poets to life

I hate you for
Touching me with such intensity
my skin burned like fire

Most of all
I HATE YOU FOR
making me
FALL IN LOVE WITH YOU

Then you walk away like I never existed!

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Re: AAAAHHHH!!!!

Post by judih » January 31st, 2011, 12:18 am

i'm screaming in empathy
with the echoes of your voice

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Re: AAAAHHHH!!!!

Post by saw » January 31st, 2011, 7:31 am

graphic emotion night writer.....thanx for sharing.......
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Re: AAAAHHHH!!!!

Post by Doreen Peri » January 31st, 2011, 8:26 pm

Powerful!

Excruciating.

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Re: AAAAHHHH!!!!

Post by creativesoul » January 31st, 2011, 11:27 pm

never can really get away from love
even when you walk away
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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Re: AAAAHHHH!!!!

Post by Night Writer » February 1st, 2011, 2:23 pm

Thank you....I feel as though I am stuck on one topic until I am able to completely get all these emotions out of me.

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Re: AAAAHHHH!!!!

Post by rshreve » February 1st, 2011, 2:27 pm

very emotional write
great peice

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