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you loved me

Posted: February 1st, 2011, 11:17 pm
by creativesoul
saturated in french toast and sunlight
smiles and laughter, giggling all nite
that after i love you glow
roses and snow
i hear your coyote
threatening abandonment
love will never let you go

flying fish and coral reef
sand that holds my hands

the sound of blame
excluding all goodness

is a road back to shame

walk with your head high
live well
be the change you want to see happen
fill that brain with new ideas
rock the casbah
eat ice cream for dinner

all my friends say
you are looking thinner
i lost all the baggage
thankfully so
became a swimmer

Re: you loved me

Posted: February 2nd, 2011, 4:45 am
by dadio
keep on writing this genre of poetry.

giggling all nite
that after i love you glow
roses and snow

( good lines) 8)

Re: you loved me

Posted: February 2nd, 2011, 12:46 pm
by creativesoul
cool

Re: you loved me

Posted: February 2nd, 2011, 7:04 pm
by justwalt
be the change you want to see happen
fill that brain with new ideas
rock the casbah
the coyote thrives here in NE PA... transplanted by the auto insurance
companies years ago. I can step out my front door right now and call
them.... two or more packs will answer.

love the write

Re: you loved me

Posted: February 2nd, 2011, 10:25 pm
by Hollweg
I said I loved you.
I meant it when I said it.
I know it by heart.

Re: you loved me

Posted: February 3rd, 2011, 9:02 am
by joel
creativesoul wrote: flying fish and coral reef
sand that holds my hands

the sound of blame
excluding all goodness

is a road back to shame
The whole flow is awesome...especially these lines, for me...really liking these.