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Semiconscious Choice
Posted: February 5th, 2011, 11:29 pm
by justwalt
Waking before the morning,
the air is cool and calm-
I can hear the voices calling,
with no faces to put then on-
In a dream I saw the ending,
you were there just as before-
time seemed to be unbending,
as the board still showed no score-
Of course, there was no warning,
how could one expect to know?
but the actor was not performing,
for the sake of any show-
Now the stillness is so charming,
fitting the scenery well-
logic is also disarming,
letting amity swell-
As will the sun come rising,
soon too, good spirits ascend-
today the voices aren't surprising,
having lost the need to pretend-
wgs
'90-'11
Re: Semiconscious Choice
Posted: February 6th, 2011, 10:56 am
by saw
the journeys of life, like the cycles of the days, our perceptions "unbending"
to show sides that were previously concealed..............enjoyed it...
Re: Semiconscious Choice
Posted: February 6th, 2011, 2:42 pm
by dadio
Thought provoking poem.
Re: Semiconscious Choice
Posted: February 6th, 2011, 10:17 pm
by justwalt
a poem to a friend... Donna. written from
prison in '90 and touched up a bit yesterday.
it was a very weird combination of things, (at the time),
that inspired this one. I don't think I could've explained
it even then... it just came and went in a few moments.
thanks
Re: Semiconscious Choice
Posted: February 6th, 2011, 11:48 pm
by creativesoul
nice
Re: Semiconscious Choice
Posted: February 7th, 2011, 9:18 pm
by Doreen Peri
Walt... you do end-rhyme so well.... some people make it sound so sing-songy, but not you. I enjoyed this piece.
I owe you a return message.
Apologies for the delay.
Real life got in the way.
Don't know what else to say.
Can't write back today.
(But will soon.)
Re: Semiconscious Choice
Posted: February 8th, 2011, 7:19 pm
by justwalt
thanks girls... and... I thought this rhyme structure was "traditional", and
being that like the stripped-down basic model car... no power windows, no
anti-lock brakes and no full sized spare tire... thanks