down the road

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snowman
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down the road

Post by snowman » April 8th, 2011, 6:03 am

as I walk down life's road it parts, leading me to make a choice
turn toward the uncertain beauty of the future
or the familiar path of lonely ,and the echoes of my own voice
your sirens song and silver laugh are quite the lure


turn toward the uncertain beauty of the future
shiver in anticipation of the touch of our bodies
your sirens song and silver laugh are quite the lure
run swiftly away from life out to pasture

shiver in anticipation of the touch of our bodies
one warm gentle kiss soft and moist
leave my past at the crossroads and head for sunny skies
as I walk down life's road it parts, leading me to make a choice

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Re: down the road

Post by creativesoul » April 8th, 2011, 8:33 am

nice write snowbird, oops- ahh great place to heal snt it? good luck with choices, it can be tricky! smile
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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Re: down the road

Post by dadio » April 10th, 2011, 8:42 am

An impressive poem.

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Re: down the road

Post by snowman » April 12th, 2011, 3:12 am

creativesoul
in the words of rush even if i refuse to choose i still have made a choice
thanks always for your feedback makes me feel accepted
which always feels good
thanks dadio
this was an attempt at a french form the pantoum

write on
snowbirdman

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Re: down the road

Post by revolutionrabbit » April 12th, 2011, 3:54 am

i had not read this poem
i did not know you used the word crossroads
but there is a slight similar vibe

leaving it

i was thinking more of a blues song vibe

snowman
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Re: down the road

Post by snowman » April 23rd, 2011, 4:19 am

i love the blues thanks for reading

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Re: down the road

Post by edsiejka » April 25th, 2011, 11:19 am

Great poem...lonely in its creativity.

regards,


ed

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Re: down the road

Post by saw » April 27th, 2011, 6:41 am

the journey is perplexing at times....due I feel, to its random nature....we make choices here and there, but I often wonder who's in control.....but loved ones, ones that can empathize, sure make the trek richer.......nice work
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Re: down the road

Post by snowman » April 28th, 2011, 10:43 pm

ed
much thanks for responding
saw
i wonder about control too but know it probably isn't me
thanks so much for the positive feedback
write on
dave

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