personal refutation

[e_dog]

i am not okay
with impermanence

i want to hold you
in my arms forever

i want to go back
to the past
and say things
differently

i am not okay
with impermanence

without the feel
of your body
i am without
my own

i want to see
you smiling
an eternal moment

i am not okay
with impermanence

all the keys are lost
the bed is empty
you should be here
beside me

i feel used by time
and forgotten by memory

i am not okay

[hester_prynne]

not okay fades to okay.
shrug.
permanence shrinks,
like sand
in dorothy's hourglass,
like castles on the beach,
only the tides
are permanent.


E-dog, I really can relate to the sentiment here.
Comes across very strong.
Nice job
(squirm squirm)

H

[mousey1]

Christ! Now you got me crying!!!!!!!

I must say this is a moving piece.

You got me right here man(jabbing at my heart muscle)

"i want to go back
to the past
and say things
differently"

"i feel used by time
and forgotten by memory"

"i am not okay"

A picture paints a thousand words, even if it's only a "smiley"

Leaving the room now......very sad.......

Thanks for the read edog. A very few well chosen words can say it all. 'Preciate.

Ummmm, this would have me beatin' down the door to get let back in. In fact I'd be a puddle, a big weepy puddle at your feet.

[judih]

a very anti-buddhist piece
clinging to the past
indulging in remorse

oh, e! you got some karma to clean

(but, yeah...written honest and written pure)

judih

[e_dog]

you got some karma to clean

don't we all?!

but even if thisis so, may it be that a dogma has sullied my karma.

(what dogma? that the poem's narrator is the poet herself)

in any case, the poem, for what its worth, could be construed as not intended to BE anti-buddhist but a poem ABOUT that which buddhism diagnoses (correctly or not).

[Axanderdeath]

good poem


get over it. I what it feels like. thats the besty thjiong to do.

if that was true.