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sillyness

Post by sonofthesun » May 7th, 2011, 3:12 am

she said she knew
but it was all makebelieve
when the hammer came down
she didnt know anything
it was all happenstance
whatever and whatever
again
she said she knew
but she didnt know anything
just a wandering child
hoping for a father before death
There is no empty space

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Re: sillyness

Post by Doreen Peri » May 7th, 2011, 7:07 pm

gotta think about this one.. hit hard... trying to puzzle it out

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Re: sillyness

Post by keithalanhamilton » May 8th, 2011, 9:07 am

makebelieve and happenstance
hmmmmm....... Synchronicity :)

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Re: sillyness

Post by creativesoul » May 8th, 2011, 8:13 pm

i know that healing comes in all sizes and shapes- but i dont get this- whatever whatever- death=father- dunno i guess it works for you...
maybe she knew what you meant
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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Re: sillyness

Post by sonofthesun » May 8th, 2011, 10:52 pm

well thanks for responding all...im not one to explain what i write...as most things i write aren't straight forward and i go back and forth on certain ways they mean...quick version- this is about a girl who gets pregnant and doesnt know who the father is(2 possibles)...gets a roundabout date and thinks she knows...then gets a different date and its the other way...and its still close enough that either could still be the father ...at the end i could of put birth but i wanted it finite. birth is limitless, especially future birth. and although she never had a father there, its makes it about her unborn child and his future. will either man be his dad? will someone else? many interpretations in my own mind. im not a fan of concrete. and the story hasnt been finished. cheers
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Re: sillyness

Post by judih » May 8th, 2011, 11:29 pm

interesting
and thnx for the elaboration

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Re: sillyness

Post by sonofthesun » May 9th, 2011, 12:13 am

thanks Judah. and about the whatever whatever...not a negative, its all encompassing. i enjoy that word although i loath the phrase "it is what it is". i will never say it
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