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tobacco

Posted: June 2nd, 2011, 4:12 pm
by joel
You love my sweet tobacco taste, the burn
you pull from underneath my ashen waste—
you’ve loved the breath I’ve warmed for you, embraced
the heat I’ve placed in you— and now you yearn
for more of me and likewise now I turn
for more of you— and all of this is based
on something cool, carcinogenic, laced
with light that lingers longingly. You’ll learn
I’m not afraid to know you love me.
And if for nothing else, I’ll love you too
because you weren’t afraid of loving me.
And though the atmosphere grows stale with too,
too many trails of blue and burnt and me,
a sweet old stench will say I love you too.

Re: tobacco

Posted: June 3rd, 2011, 4:46 am
by dadio
l love this poem, Joel.

Re: tobacco

Posted: June 4th, 2011, 2:25 pm
by emel.scott
Though I think I see where you're going, too many "too/me"s for me too like the second half of this.

Re: tobacco

Posted: June 5th, 2011, 2:21 pm
by constantine
ahh, the pristine stench of love - may it never dissipate.

Re: tobacco

Posted: June 6th, 2011, 4:41 pm
by joel
emel.scott wrote:Though I think I see where you're going, too many "too/me"s for me too like the second half of this.
Yup. I Agree. Me too, me too, me too.

Re: tobacco

Posted: June 7th, 2011, 11:08 am
by ButterflyKiss
I like this....although...it makes me want to brush my teeth!