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6:36 in the morning

Posted: October 14th, 2011, 6:57 am
by Kailashana
With a sky so grey,
clouds arrive to break
up its monotony,
with a wind so cold
to an unseen
stretch of limbs, howling
with a lake so hungry
stealing shadows
of wild geese, passing

days are shorter now,
pallid with an early decay,

there is a distance
I travel to the midnight moon, lamenting
with the streetlights, a loneliness.

But you are here, my darling,
sleeping. I pluck
another feather
from your dreams,
growing daylight.


(previewing this poem, I lost the format--HELP!)

Re: 6:36 in the morning

Posted: October 14th, 2011, 11:59 pm
by judih
format isn't everything
content overrides form
but wish i could help

html might fix the scene

but your poem is sensational, feather plucking to eavesdrop on dreams

Re: 6:36 in the morning

Posted: October 17th, 2011, 3:21 am
by dadio
A poem of depth and beauty.

Re: 6:36 in the morning

Posted: October 17th, 2011, 2:48 pm
by Kailashana
Thank you.

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Re: 6:36 in the morning

Posted: November 8th, 2011, 6:05 am
by Poetsden
Like the imagery of this poem.

Re: 6:36 in the morning

Posted: November 8th, 2011, 9:03 am
by theirishsea
Magnificent closing stanza to this poem.

Re: 6:36 in the morning

Posted: November 18th, 2011, 1:37 pm
by goldenmyst
A memorable morning love poem. You write with metaphorical lyricism abounding. I love how your words make me feel.

John