now you see it, now you don't

Post by **saw** » February 18th, 2013, 10:51 am

please be patient with me
i am not the same man
I was ten minutes ago
I am a man in rat-a-tat motion

dust avoids me,
the motes instinctively understand
they have no chance
to settle upon my eyelids

just as your perceptions of me form,
just as your internal gauges see
the red arrow stop
on your incremental black line

just as you get a reading ....
i am gone

Post by **joanne goshen** » February 18th, 2013, 11:22 am

crisp words,liked the rat a tat,and the image of dust knowing not to settle on the eyelids

Post by **constantine** » February 18th, 2013, 12:27 pm

i too scoff at that incremental black line - it's very presumptive - i dare say. nice economy (the poem - not the economy)

Post by **justwalt** » February 18th, 2013, 2:13 pm

patience, he says,
like time was something that
I keep in my back pocket...

hello... hello?

my patience is...

oh, whatever.

Post by **dadio** » March 15th, 2013, 3:33 pm

I have this problem with money. Nonetheless, this one one heck of a fine poem and gets to grips well.

Post by **stilltrucking** » March 15th, 2013, 7:39 pm

That way Big Brother can't get a reading on you.

One had the impression that there was dust in the creases of her face

Post by **theirishsea** » March 16th, 2013, 11:36 am

I like this. Strong poetry here.

Post by **saw** » March 16th, 2013, 9:34 pm

thanx, one and all....always appreciate the feedback

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