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that part

Post by creativesoul » May 22nd, 2013, 10:36 pm

there were these small places
where the nerves transformed
whatever was melted and liquified

look up at the stars
whimper and howl like a wolf
she took the torch
blazed thru the metals of hearts
transfixed by time
eroded by rain and sadness

the couple next door argued loudly
she sought something
brighter bigger.................... wholeness
not there could she find it
twisted on the back of her ankles with panties
drenched and solied by love
sweat tingled what was once her heart
she loved sex

she barricaded the door so the water
could not drown her fire
no voices of fear=no recall of a badly written movie
words came and went
whole sentences disappeared
like they did
was no one left after the sweetness was gone

dusk-she is cold- used to warm herself on his fire-
she is dead now
all hair colors faded
all make up gone
shoes and handbags and sunglasses
bath towels and stupid dishes
garage sale
fading from this belittling flesh
her loins still on fire
her heart beats like a drum under a full moon
:mrgreen:
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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Re: that part

Post by saw » May 23rd, 2013, 8:08 am

great...a sexy tell-all locomotive of a poem.....the emotion is front and center....nice !
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Re: that part

Post by dadio » May 26th, 2013, 9:14 am

One of my favourites of yours. 8)

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Re: that part

Post by creativesoul » May 26th, 2013, 10:11 am

you fellas make it all smooth and sweet=love that
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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Re: that part

Post by mnaz » May 27th, 2013, 11:12 pm

yes, that part, the human part, the spiritual part.

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Re: that part

Post by the mingo » May 28th, 2013, 11:48 am

O Fuck!

You do this - you go along & along & you write this & you write that and all the time things like this are inside you waiting for their chance to bust loose and WHAM! And there it is ... keeps me eyes open when it comes to you - just love down-in-the-blood expression - keeps me coming 'round - & when I read these things my first thought following my delight is ...

O Fuck!

Men end up usually going porno on this kind of thing but women? When a woman goes erotic like this spilling it out of the gut it makes every man in the vicinity want to stretch out and pound the the ground with his fist until the ground is dented but good.

This is me pounding - this is me denting - this is me smiling from sea to shining sea!

THX! Jana - and did I mention ...

O FUCK !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Re: that part

Post by amber » June 1st, 2013, 8:01 am

very nice post
amber

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Re: that part

Post by creativesoul » June 1st, 2013, 10:51 am

Oh fuck!!! Lol
reason is over rated, as is logic and common sense-i much prefer the passions of a crazy old woman, cats and dogs and jungle foliage- tropic rain-and a defined sense of who brings the stars up at night and the sun up in the morning---

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Re: that part

Post by the mingo » June 2nd, 2013, 10:32 am

8)
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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