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that part

Posted: May 22nd, 2013, 10:36 pm
by creativesoul
there were these small places
where the nerves transformed
whatever was melted and liquified

look up at the stars
whimper and howl like a wolf
she took the torch
blazed thru the metals of hearts
transfixed by time
eroded by rain and sadness

the couple next door argued loudly
she sought something
brighter bigger.................... wholeness
not there could she find it
twisted on the back of her ankles with panties
drenched and solied by love
sweat tingled what was once her heart
she loved sex

she barricaded the door so the water
could not drown her fire
no voices of fear=no recall of a badly written movie
words came and went
whole sentences disappeared
like they did
was no one left after the sweetness was gone

dusk-she is cold- used to warm herself on his fire-
she is dead now
all hair colors faded
all make up gone
shoes and handbags and sunglasses
bath towels and stupid dishes
garage sale
fading from this belittling flesh
her loins still on fire
her heart beats like a drum under a full moon
:mrgreen:

Re: that part

Posted: May 23rd, 2013, 8:08 am
by saw
great...a sexy tell-all locomotive of a poem.....the emotion is front and center....nice !

Re: that part

Posted: May 26th, 2013, 9:14 am
by dadio
One of my favourites of yours. 8)

Re: that part

Posted: May 26th, 2013, 10:11 am
by creativesoul
you fellas make it all smooth and sweet=love that

Re: that part

Posted: May 27th, 2013, 11:12 pm
by mnaz
yes, that part, the human part, the spiritual part.

Re: that part

Posted: May 28th, 2013, 11:48 am
by the mingo
O Fuck!

You do this - you go along & along & you write this & you write that and all the time things like this are inside you waiting for their chance to bust loose and WHAM! And there it is ... keeps me eyes open when it comes to you - just love down-in-the-blood expression - keeps me coming 'round - & when I read these things my first thought following my delight is ...

O Fuck!

Men end up usually going porno on this kind of thing but women? When a woman goes erotic like this spilling it out of the gut it makes every man in the vicinity want to stretch out and pound the the ground with his fist until the ground is dented but good.

This is me pounding - this is me denting - this is me smiling from sea to shining sea!

THX! Jana - and did I mention ...

O FUCK !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Re: that part

Posted: June 1st, 2013, 8:01 am
by amber
very nice post

Re: that part

Posted: June 1st, 2013, 10:51 am
by creativesoul
Oh fuck!!! Lol

Re: that part

Posted: June 2nd, 2013, 10:32 am
by the mingo
8)