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building the cat

Posted: March 28th, 2014, 11:47 pm
by the mingo
please come
if you show up
and find me under the car with only my legs protruding
& a banging noise going on
it won't be because i'm trying to fix something
but trying to tear something away that's broken
& don't worry about the alien music in the streets
trying to pass itself off as
a proper breakfast just as
the stars go down
then click! - a photograph - black & white
of a girl
with thin lips unhidden
by fall of hair
the tops of teeth peeking
behind the lips...
... i wonder what other poets
would have done with a girl
whose face was like that
they might have found a haiku moment
a whole new land or maybe
a continent even
or trees waking up
beginning to speak
to each other
as the turtles
still sleep
snugged in deep mud
just beneath the bottom

Re: building the cat

Posted: March 29th, 2014, 11:53 am
by stilltrucking
8)

Re: building the cat

Posted: March 29th, 2014, 4:36 pm
by david
Loved the imagery, the ending did it for me.
find me under the car with only my legs protruding
& a banging noise going on
I enjoyed "hearing" this as well as seeing it.

David

Re: building the cat

Posted: March 30th, 2014, 9:29 am
by the mingo
Thx Jack
Thx David

Re: building the cat

Posted: March 30th, 2014, 2:23 pm
by Arcadia
360ยบ attention with surround music, smiling-witty poem mingo!!!!!!! :D Gracias for sharing it!

Re: building the cat

Posted: March 30th, 2014, 8:36 pm
by the mingo
Thx Veronica - 8) 8) & you're welcome

Re: building the cat

Posted: March 31st, 2014, 1:38 am
by dadio
One of your best. 8)