before writing was invented

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before writing was invented

Post by the mingo » November 25th, 2014, 12:53 am

the clouds moved in
the dreams started
babies were born
some became bigots with bellies
others let their edges go dusty
america grew a fabulous animal face
and lived in a cave
outside candy cars went
up & down the highways
playgrounds of dark scripture by the roadside
that climbed up into the trees
licking the clouds as they went
unhooking rhythm pornographies
stiletto heels & swollen nipples
all this before writing was invented
when all the lands were holy
amniotic
lycanthropic
necromantic
enchanted
distilled
the air as delicious as food
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Re: before writing was invented

Post by mtmynd » November 25th, 2014, 9:43 am

i'm reluctant to put any reply to words given the $10 words you've generously heaped upon but another original poem from your catapulting madcap mind that deserves a neon billboard overlooking Mt Washington.

I'll give you a 10 (not in dollars) for this, el mingo, as I stretch my wallet in some adjective worthy of your post... 8)
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Re: before writing was invented

Post by saw » November 25th, 2014, 11:34 am

wild, like an LSD trip captured ...a brisk, colorful walk through time... 8)
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Re: before writing was invented

Post by revolutionR » November 25th, 2014, 1:05 pm

tight... 8)

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Re: before writing was invented

Post by WIREMAN » November 25th, 2014, 9:25 pm

puffy nipples
in america
ugh....i could
elaborate...
yeah it was
in '77 and she
was a dancer
in a little club
downtown....yeah
i know it sounds
like a bob seger
tune, but it was
the way it went down
she made my life
miserable and sublime
daily and i had to walk
away in the end
puffy nipples and all..... 8)
me I feel like I'm becoming some kinda Kung fu t.v. Priest.....

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Post by WIREMAN » November 25th, 2014, 9:32 pm

ps...i had to order dessert here at the bar after reading this mingo...... :lol:
me I feel like I'm becoming some kinda Kung fu t.v. Priest.....

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Re: before writing was invented

Post by judih » November 25th, 2014, 11:33 pm

a step into the twilight zone
where flashbacks dance the samba

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Re: before writing was invented

Post by the mingo » November 26th, 2014, 9:50 am

Thx folks - 8)
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Re: before writing was invented

Post by 68degrees » November 26th, 2014, 11:46 am

"...the air as delicious as food."

Ain't it the truth. I was a bartender through college…when I closed to clean up I always opened a side window behind the counter. There was a bakery down the block that would be baking its bread, rolls, etc. for the next morning. It was heaven.

Nice poem.

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Re: before writing was invented

Post by the mingo » November 26th, 2014, 6:11 pm

now ya hit on something there - I have always avoided getting a job in a bakery because I would be a butterball before too long - I'd never be able to stay out of the bread or the pies - no lie
even reading your description of it I could smell it -
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Post by mnaz » December 31st, 2014, 6:02 am

"candy cars went
up & down the highways
playgrounds of dark scripture by the roadside
that climbed up into the trees
licking the clouds as they went
"

Damn, man.

"when all the lands were holy"...

Pretty much, ya. Ya slayin' me here, and thanks ...

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Re: before writing was invented

Post by the mingo » January 1st, 2015, 9:11 am

thx Mark - we all in it - jam on to the last wiggle - 8)
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Re: before writing was invented

Post by WIREMAN » January 1st, 2015, 1:21 pm

it is a jam life we b mixin in whether they know or dont...jam on me mingo....delicioso poem...glad it got pumped back up! 8)
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