The winter Raven pt 2 (through the eyes of the Raven)

[Tjflowers80]

High above those below I soar;
A cackle in my mind, a screech in my caw
Swooping down to land on the open door
Laughing eerily at the humanoid flaw.

My beak is sharp enough to pierce
My feathers are dark as blackened night
My talons open, ready and fierce
To grasp what I seek desperately tight.

Diving down to ring in fear;
I laugh at the cowardly act
Satisfied by the child's tear
And at how they all look to react.

The cold though bitter is refreshing and sweet
To take off into this flight
I am the favored of evil complete
Drawing fear into the blackened night.

Cawing in my spiraling hellish games
Then again to the heavens to soar;
Only to go down again screaming the names
And in my echoing caw you hear......"nevermore, nevermore"

[saw]

it's good to hear the raven's side of the story....rhyming can be forced, but I think this holds up

[revolutionR]

as far as the thing about rhymes I agree, they can seem forced, when I first
began writing poetry, I never would use a rhyme, I thought it was a crime
right? it was a no no, most or a lot of people, come into poetry thinking
perhaps because of their introduction into poetry, that rhyming is how
you write a poem, maybe because of class room experience, or other
influence, I would not use rhyme for years. I however after writing
a lot of poetry on the internet, began to use rhyme almost a subversion.
I am not sure exactly how that happened, just that I was experimenting
a lot, because I was writing a lot on certain sites. Now I tend to just let it happen
or not happen. I think that TJflowers is using rhyme because she believes
that is the best way to proceed. I see a real potential in her, and I like how
she claims her territory, so how her style develops is contingent upon her
vision, not as much as her vision on her style, at least at this juncture.That
is what I see, anyway.Hello, TJ.

[Tjflowers80]

These two pieces came at me from a newer perspective of facing myself. The first like I said was the people's reaction to the Raven due to the fear ensued by Edgar Allan Poe. But the way I see its am the Raven and the people don't know what I am capable of until they break my barrier. The first is about the people and how they see me, the second is about me and how I see myself in a newfound perspective. Both poems took less than five minutes to write, and are very different from what I'm used to writing, but In the end, all is as it should be. RevolutionR thank you for your perspective on my style and my words, your compliment was overwhelming and I am filled with gratitude that you have welcomed me so well. Thank you. And hello in return.

Jess

[revolutionR]

Jess, I don't know what is going on in your life, you indicated something about your job
and maybe people you have to deal with.As far as poetry goes, I have very definite
views about what I am looking for, I look for style and vision.For one, it tells me a lot that
you said you wrote these companion pieces in five. So that means that it comes quick for
you. Or even if you take your time, with it. In any case, I see you have a lot of potential.
You also have a grasp of what inspires you, you are not timid. Poe is a good place to
begin from, or to end up with. Andre' Breton said, "Poe is surrealist in adventure".I make no
bones about it, my main influence is Surrealism, But I like a lot of poets and writers.I
have read a lot of poets and writers, I met poets who were famous, and many who
were not famous. There are a lot of poets that I never got around to reading, some I just
was not interested in especially.What ever it is that makes you want to write poetry, or
prose, if it helps you to find your center, to draw back the veil, to feed your soul, then
let lose your Raven.

[Tjflowers80]

You sound smitten revolutionR. I'm very flattered. Thank you.