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not dead yet

Posted: February 4th, 2015, 10:56 am
by saw
without a doubt you are easy on the eyes
and I have a history of letting that fact alone
get me in a little trouble of some kind, but
I'm not here to complain about the trouble
that comes from avoiding being overly ordinary

never could see myself trampling the roads of boredom
in order to please my audiences, and today
I'm just wondering when all that will stop, which day ?
tell me.....which day will I transform

become indifferent

when will a cute feminine smile
no longer stir the simmering stew,
when will laughing eyes not be the irreverence
I'm looking for

I suppose my regression could be just around any corner
so why does it still feel exactly the same to this old fool ?
same as it ever was, same as it ever was

but these talking heads aren't on meet the press
they're singin' in my heart once again, and once again
I'm about to be seduced by potential,
by the wiles of mystery

knocked silly as a skinny schoolboy
by the flagpole at lunch time....all i can say
regarding these notches in my totem
is... I guess I'm not dead yet

Re: not dead yet

Posted: February 4th, 2015, 1:44 pm
by the mingo
but these talking heads aren't on meet the press
they're singin' in my heart once again, and once again
I'm about to be seduced by potential,
by the wiles of mystery
o-o 8)

Re: not dead yet

Posted: February 4th, 2015, 9:44 pm
by WIREMAN
.....it aint over till its over steve 8)

Re: not dead yet

Posted: February 5th, 2015, 12:50 am
by revolutionR
It's important to write it out
the more introspective the better
but it's not so easy, all i have now
is the writing, the best thing that
ever happened to me, is gone
all i have are these words
as they pour through my soul
but there never enough words
to fill up the hole, where she use to be

Re: not dead yet

Posted: February 5th, 2015, 1:26 am
by Doreen Peri
You certainly aren't!.... Sounds terrific! Loved these lines.
they're singin' in my heart once again, and once again
I'm about to be seduced by potential,
by the wiles of mystery

knocked silly as a skinny schoolboy
by the flagpole at lunch time....all i can say
regarding these notches in my totem
is... I guess I'm not dead yet

Re: not dead yet

Posted: February 5th, 2015, 10:51 am
by saw
thank you colleagues....always great to read the responses.....I guess we all post poems for different reasons....some of which I'm sure we share, but the comments are so very important to the process.....for years there has been a debate about what a poetry forum should be....should only be about critiquing ?.....I have seen this tried, and it seems nearly impossible to keep contributors comments solely on the merits of the words laid down on the screen...as humans we want to connect in every way possible...and so it goes.....a forum has a life of its own...it breathes, it makes its own decisions...and I like that.....sheeesh, sorry for getting carried away here...oh well

thanks for the comments

Re: not dead yet

Posted: February 5th, 2015, 11:37 am
by the mingo
you're right about the part comments play and the need for people to connect - to tell ya the truth i'm in it for the threads - they are such mysterious creatures - a lot of times it's the thread that is the real jam, the real poetry, the real action - and you never can tell what will fire one off, what will not only take root but grow to take on a life of it's own - a thread is the single most fascinating thing of the whole process -

HELL YEAH, MONGOLIA!!!

Re: not dead yet

Posted: February 5th, 2015, 5:28 pm
by 68degrees
"I'm not here to complain about the trouble
that comes from avoiding being overly ordinary"

There's music in these lines from here to hear....

68degrees

Re: not dead yet

Posted: February 7th, 2015, 11:20 am
by saw
thanx 68...it does sound musical, doesn't it ?......thanx, might have to craft a song