tell you about when I loved
fields of peas popping the pods
in the hollow of a hill
sweet peas lying in my open hand
your fingers, my lips
tiny peas the size of hail
tasting sweeter than candy
sorry to post and run, got stuff to do for a while...any comments/suggestions/ideas/shits are welcome -- I'm easy
middle of June sunning
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middle of June sunning
shadowplay
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Re: middle of June sunning
Really like this SP, your best one yet (for me).
I like the human interjection into the piece, just the right amount I thought.
I thought a play around with line breaks may enhance slightly.
I like the human interjection into the piece, just the right amount I thought.
I thought a play around with line breaks may enhance slightly.
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Re: middle of June sunning
I'm cool with that, thanks -- working on something really important and boring right now.....will be back.....
shadowplay
Re: middle of June sunning
sugar snap !....well done
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading
you may end up where you are heading
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