Horsing Around

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Re: Horsing Around

Post by mnaz » March 26th, 2015, 1:51 pm

I didn't realize there was a "pro" camp ("pro" or "anti"?) ...

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Re: Horsing Around

Post by Doreen Peri » March 26th, 2015, 2:02 pm

Who is the "character like T"?
Why is the word bone in quotation marks?
Hooking and sleeping would both be more powerful if you removed the "ing" and used hook and sleep instead, for instance "wordivores who sleep in the recycling bin" (nice line... loved the coined word, wordivores)

Overall, I liked it. Vivid imagery.

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Re: Horsing Around

Post by Doreen Peri » March 26th, 2015, 2:41 pm

Ton Romus wrote:Nice try Doreen!

8)
What are you talking about? I didn't TRY. I asked sincere questions. Do you want to answer them or not?

If not, no problem, but don't fuck with me, get it?

I also offered a knowledgeable critique. Hey, if you can critique our member's poems, I can critique yours. So, either ignore it or reply to it but don't tell me "Nice try". That's demeaning.

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Re: Horsing Around

Post by Doreen Peri » March 26th, 2015, 3:01 pm

Nice try.... to say you'd never fuck with me while you're fucking with me.

Haha! Too funny!

Also, nice try on your poem.

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Re: Horsing Around

Post by shadowplay » March 26th, 2015, 3:35 pm

damn it I just now signed in
sorry I'm late

I loved:
hung
tender delicasees
pleasure trap
horny
meta
suspended
martini glass

I loved a lot o' your other shit too

don't stop!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Re: Horsing Around

Post by WIREMAN » March 26th, 2015, 4:05 pm

careful with ur language Doreen
my kids read this shit???
oh shes almost 33, damn :lol:
im in some kinda twilight zone
the main thing i get from this is
Mr. T. better be careful or he'll
get splinters in his mouth....oh yeah
& a big clydesdale up the wazoooooo.....
me I feel like I'm becoming some kinda Kung fu t.v. Priest.....

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Re: Horsing Around

Post by Doreen Peri » March 26th, 2015, 4:33 pm

shadowplay wrote:damn it I just now signed in
sorry I'm late
What are you late for? You can't be late here. We're open 24/7
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Wireman, sorry about the language but I'm sure your 33-year-old daughter would understand because you brought her up right not to allow people to fuck with her! :mrgreen:

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Re: Horsing Around

Post by WIREMAN » March 26th, 2015, 4:47 pm

now im wondering bout all them nieces and nephews....ugh....the :lol: makes everything all right...especially with a piece called horsing around.....yucka yucka!
me I feel like I'm becoming some kinda Kung fu t.v. Priest.....

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Re: Horsing Around

Post by Doreen Peri » March 26th, 2015, 4:50 pm

Aw now don't get yer panties in a twist, rollerman ..... and please don't wet them! We don't have the staff to clean up after you. There's a store right down the street from you that sells Depends. Please get yerself some before your weewee peepees. Seriously.

I was just horsin' around with my critique. What gives me the right to write a critique? Just ignore it, ok? It was daft. Really. No seriously, just kidding. Why is the word bone in quotation marks? Hey, if you have to 'splain yer poems (that's POEMS) to people, then maybe you got a lotta 'splainin' to do, Lucy.

:P 8) :D :!:

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Re: Horsing Around

Post by WIREMAN » March 26th, 2015, 4:56 pm

im relieved...now i can go get dinner....never saw u do that without a :D before....but i figured u was just horsin around Doreen...
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me I feel like I'm becoming some kinda Kung fu t.v. Priest.....

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Re: Horsing Around

Post by shadowplay » March 26th, 2015, 5:01 pm

I don't mind a little critique, a little suggestion here or there, or a question about any of my poems. I'm not above any of that. That's OK ain't it?
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Re: Horsing Around

Post by Doreen Peri » March 26th, 2015, 5:03 pm

I'm ALWAYS just horsin' around, Wireman...

(except for when I'm not.)

:P haha :D

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Re: Horsing Around

Post by Doreen Peri » March 26th, 2015, 5:06 pm

shadowplay wrote:I don't mind a little critique, a little suggestion here or there, or a question about any of my poems. I'm not above any of that. That's OK ain't it?
Sure, why not... y'all came from a critique site so I figure that's what you're used to... but that doesn't mean you'll get critique here. You'll prolly get it from Ton since that's what he does sometimes. Many of the rest of us... well... we just WRITE. Right on!

If you WANT critique, I suggest writing "Please Critique" next to your poem's title and see who steps up to the plate.

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Re: Horsing Around

Post by shadowplay » March 26th, 2015, 5:09 pm

Unless you want to just outlaw critique here. Maybe make a regulation that says no critique allowed. Like, maybe not even helpful suggestions or something. I don't know.
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Re: Horsing Around

Post by Doreen Peri » March 26th, 2015, 5:19 pm

Unless you want to just outlaw critique here. Maybe make a regulation that says no critique allowed. Like, maybe not even helpful suggestions or something. I don't know.
No! No way. We don't outlaw anything here... even outlaws. Matter of fact, this place is FULL of outlaws. Hah!

Only ONE rule here... RESPECT .. respect for each other and respect for copyright. That's it.

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