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Two Spoken Word Pieces Later
Posted: June 28th, 2015, 10:58 pm
by Doreen Peri
Listen to this, she said.
Sure, I'd love to, his head nodding
and so they did, the bid of the moment
offered like a sacrificial lamb and the
damn things played and the way
the music hung on the edge of yet
again another dawn, the songs went out
into a missed mist and this
was all there was
until he insisted:
"I thought we were going to watch a little TV."
Re: Two Spoken Word Pieces Later
Posted: July 1st, 2015, 1:10 pm
by mnaz
TV is the devil ...
Re: Two Spoken Word Pieces Later
Posted: July 1st, 2015, 2:08 pm
by Doreen Peri
We like Criminal Minds and Law & Order.
Re: Two Spoken Word Pieces Later
Posted: July 1st, 2015, 2:10 pm
by Doreen Peri
New tshirt shop coming soon.... gotta set it up. Starting a new business.
Here's one...
On the front: Forensics & DNA
On the back: Can't get away with nothin' any more.
Re: Two Spoken Word Pieces Later
Posted: July 1st, 2015, 6:08 pm
by mnaz
Yeah, I used to watch Law and Order-- pretty good show. Not all TV is garbage of course (only 90% of it). I just reached a point several years ago where I couldn't take any more of the endless barrage of blip-vert, shiny, flashy, A.D.D., loud, insidious hard-sell commercials. Gawd, just unbelievably relentless . . . Enough!
I do a lot more reading now.
Re: Two Spoken Word Pieces Later
Posted: July 3rd, 2015, 8:02 am
by theirishsea
Interesting flow of thoughts in this. I kinda get it but wonder about
the songs went out
into a missed mist and this
I like the sound but like a mist the meaning is a little hazy----but I kinda get it. I think we could have a long discussion on the meaning of "mist" in the context of the poem. I see the mist as a desirable thing, something added to the solid world. TV at the end evaporates that mist quickly like turning on a noon sun, or maybe blows it away like a strong puff of wind.
The mist is both a fantasy of feeling, a layer of emotional enchanting music, a dew-filled touch of affection, a layer of transforming hard edges into a soft wonderful cuddle.
There is a cynical note that plays counterpoint in this poem. The poem is not just a snuggle up but also an airing of disappointment.
Re: Two Spoken Word Pieces Later
Posted: July 3rd, 2015, 3:26 pm
by Doreen Peri
Very interesting reply, Dan... I keep reading it and re-reading it. It was really a funny comment in reply to listening to a couple of my spoken word pieces, the comment about watching TV. Hah! I laughed aloud and thought I'd document a moment. Really it's just word music with a punch line, but I like your interpretation... thank you!