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aqualung

Posted: July 4th, 2015, 2:10 am
by saw
you will need to hone your taste buds
to taste the struggling fruit, throw in
a guardian angel to intervene at the proper time
take the bullet, divert the arrow, repel
the marauding pirates that pillage the lungs

when is the best time to leave the bar, settle up
all of your debts the best you can, will we know,
will we become aware soon enough that it's never cool
to be that guest that overstays his welcome, that
unsolicited pest slurring his speech like that creepy jethro tull sot

with his runny nose and his locomotive breath,
I hope I can read the signs, impact the outcome
sail away like a glorious black swan
gliding on fire, an effortless pyre of tomorrow
bound for new adventures in the ashes of renewal

Re: aqualung

Posted: July 4th, 2015, 8:56 am
by WIREMAN
and please no eyeing little girls with bad intent......good un steve

Re: aqualung

Posted: July 6th, 2015, 9:54 am
by mtmynd
just needs Ian Anderson's flute playing in the background while you read this in a dimly lit bar in a back alley of Austin aptly named "aqualung'...

Re: aqualung

Posted: July 6th, 2015, 5:19 pm
by theirishsea
From before I remember you've said you aren't interested in getting your poems published but I think that is wrong. Look at these lines:

when is the best time to leave the bar, settle up
all of your debts the best you can, will we know,
will we become aware soon enough that it's never cool
to be that guest that overstays his welcome, that
unsolicited pest slurring his speech like that creepy jethro tull sot

with his runny nose and his locomotive breath,


really good lines. They should be published somewhere. Great that we have them here but the problem with these forums is that poems get buried quick. Your poems should be preserved for future readers.

hope I can read the signs, impact the outcome
sail away like a glorious black swan
gliding on fire, an effortless pyre of tomorrow
bound for new adventures in the ashes of renewal


That glorious black swan should be floating in people's minds.

Re: aqualung

Posted: July 6th, 2015, 5:37 pm
by saw
thanx wire, mtmynd....much obliged

and danno, i really appreciate your encouragement....thanx for the ultra-positive feedback


who knows, maybe I will begin to put some things together...thanx again