Dimes

[Doreen Peri]

Written in April. I don't know if I posted this before. I wrote it spontaneously on another site in response to one of Ton's poems.

.......

I guess it depends on your reaction time
when you find a dime under the sheet 'cause
your sweet young thing cheated on you
and you never keep dimes in your pockets
so could be possible your eye sockets might
just pop right outa yer head seein' that dime
laying there on the bed when at the same time
since you work for organized crime, yer not
at all concerned about her double-timing
since you'll have him taken care of ahead of
time long before his next arrival time is scheduled,
but ya gotta admit it's a helluva thing when you
need to drop a dime on that extra-time cheat,
i mean at least he coulda been neat about it
and not let his spare change rearrange your
sexual escapades like that, the fat muthucka
shoulda kept his little ding dong inside his pants
'cause romance with yer gal shouldn't include
some other dude's dimes slipping' outa his pocket
during his part-time, one-time sex crime and when
she tells you you''re imaginin' shit, just think of it
how that dime lyin' there clued you in 'cause it's
high time he paid for his sin and you'll take care of
that in no time, the filthy fucking slime's gonna get his
right between the eyes, 'cause this ain't show biz, baby,
this is the real deal, so when you announce it to yer
so-called lady that her part-time lover's been bounced,
don't even give her an ounce of elapsed time to spill
her pitiful tears 'cause she ain't gonna wanna hear it
when you throw her negligees and panties right out in
the hall, 'cause no, no tall gorgeous blonde is worth
that shit. Findin' that dime will make ya be done with it
entirely. Find yerself another dame 'cause life can turn
on a dime like that, yeah buddy, no doubt afuckin' bout it.

[theirishsea]

The drama works if you accept the premise. I don't know if I would jump to the same conclusion if I saw a dime on the bed sheet. If the premise is accepted, the poem falls into place. You have done a good job developing the situation.

[whoaisme]

sounds like a bad sitch-e-a-shun all around.


can't trust some of these damn hoes!

i really enjoyed the spontaneity of this, every line just flowed smooth and cool....could definitely be a performance piece?

go on Doreen!

[the mingo]