The First Commandment

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Rodak
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The First Commandment

Post by Rodak » February 7th, 2016, 10:54 am

I watched the arc
of her bare foot
as she sighed
that special note
and shifted her position
on the seat
of the straight back chair.

Something like a wet rose
(( flashed ))
a silent summons.

Adam naked I obeyed.

On my knees I walked
toward that gateless garden
impressed by an unspoken word
into the service of a queenly need.

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WIREMAN
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Re: The First Commandment

Post by WIREMAN » February 7th, 2016, 3:24 pm

...did u partake of the forbidden fruit?.....excellent poem 8)
me I feel like I'm becoming some kinda Kung fu t.v. Priest.....

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Re: The First Commandment

Post by leafsailors ghost » February 8th, 2016, 9:24 am

Crazy fine ..YES!

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Re: The First Commandment

Post by Rodak » February 8th, 2016, 6:58 pm

WIREMAN wrote:...did u partake of the forbidden fruit?.....excellent poem 8)
I plead the Fifth.

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Re: The First Commandment

Post by Rodak » February 8th, 2016, 6:58 pm

leafsailors ghost wrote:Crazy fine ..YES!
Thanks!

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Re: The First Commandment

Post by Doreen Peri » February 10th, 2016, 1:34 pm

Hi Rodak. Welcome to the Studio.

I like this piece... Sounds like you had fun! ;)

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