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Tiny Dancer
Posted: August 27th, 2016, 1:24 pm
by 68degrees
Woman with tears.
Woman with chapped seams.
Woman of scarlet lipstick.
Woman of raped dreams.
She once told me she wanted
to dance, later pranced
into her grave with music
coming from every hole
in her tired body.
Re: Tiny Dancer
Posted: August 27th, 2016, 4:01 pm
by revolutionR
Says a lot, in a few lines, good ink.
Re: Tiny Dancer
Posted: August 27th, 2016, 6:17 pm
by 68degrees
Thanks.
Re: Tiny Dancer
Posted: August 27th, 2016, 6:58 pm
by Grinch
Nice poem
Re: Tiny Dancer
Posted: August 27th, 2016, 8:03 pm
by 68degrees
Grinch wrote:Nice poem
Thanks.
You might get bored here
68degrees
Re: Tiny Dancer
Posted: August 27th, 2016, 10:57 pm
by judih
the music coming "from every hole in her tired body" - a powerful line. stayed with me all night.
Re: Tiny Dancer
Posted: August 28th, 2016, 6:05 am
by Grinch
You might get bored here
That's possible but I'll stick around for a while and see how it goes, so far it looks and feels OK, less of the traditional forms of poetry that I prefer but I can live with that. Nice poems are nice poems whatever flavour.
Re: Tiny Dancer
Posted: August 28th, 2016, 9:52 am
by saw
Re: Tiny Dancer
Posted: August 28th, 2016, 11:09 am
by 68degrees
judih wrote:the music coming "from every hole in her tired body" - a powerful line. stayed with me all night.
Thanks, Judih. Older poem I've been reworking. It's getting closer.
68degrees
Re: Tiny Dancer
Posted: August 28th, 2016, 11:11 am
by 68degrees
Grinch wrote:You might get bored here
That's possible but I'll stick around for a while and see how it goes, so far it looks and feels OK, less of the traditional forms of poetry that I prefer but I can live with that. Nice poems are nice poems whatever flavour.
I agree. I was talking about the temperament of the posters. Everyone is nice here. Not much to laugh it as opposed to the grammar buffoons at AT.
68degrees
Re: Tiny Dancer
Posted: August 28th, 2016, 11:13 am
by 68degrees
Nothing wrong with different, Saw. Different is good.
68degrees
Re: Tiny Dancer
Posted: August 29th, 2016, 1:38 pm
by leafsailors ghost
This is one of those poems simply amazes me . Just opens the heart and walks right in, I have known her and my heart breaks again now reading , as I know yours must have ,this is art sir.
Re: Tiny Dancer
Posted: August 29th, 2016, 5:43 pm
by 68degrees
leafsailors ghost wrote:This is one of those poems simply amazes me . Just opens the heart and walks right in, I have known her and my heart breaks again now reading , as I know yours must have ,this is art sir.
Her name was Janice. It was many years ago.
Thank you.
68degrees
