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Existence

Post by 68degrees » September 4th, 2016, 11:23 pm

Wind has returned to him,
a sun, granules of salt

There can again be new rain
on a planted field

and a flock of starlings
will re-circle to roost
before another storm

Our earth can hide
many things, even the bones
of a child

But never the tears
of a parent

(for the soul of Jacob Wetterling)
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Re: Existence (for the soul of JW)

Post by judih » September 5th, 2016, 12:01 am

energy
flies around
is it hers? his?
i know it is

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Re: Existence (for the soul of JW)

Post by leafsailors ghost » September 5th, 2016, 7:49 am

I think the universe feels those tears in the deepest of realties. As a parent and grand parent I feel this poem with and the connection to the living universe in the imagery .How can men do harm to children? I just do not understand .

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Re: Existence (for the soul of JW)

Post by 68degrees » September 5th, 2016, 10:49 pm

judih wrote:energy
flies around
is it hers? his?
i know it is
google Jacob Wetterling. The poem is about him.

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Re: Existence (for the soul of JW)

Post by 68degrees » September 5th, 2016, 10:59 pm

leafsailors ghost wrote:I think the universe feels those tears in the deepest of realties. As a parent and grand parent I feel this poem with and the connection to the living universe in the imagery .How can men do harm to children? I just do not understand .
I struggle sometimes with damning someone to an eternal hell and meaning it. It's not even a matter of execution b/c if anything warrants it, it's a crime such as this.

Maybe we write about it b/c we don't understand. Or for justification. Who the hell knows why anybody does anything these days. Twenty seven years the guy made JW's family suffer. I, too, just do not understand.

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Re: Existence (for the soul of JW)

Post by Doreen Peri » September 6th, 2016, 12:25 pm

Thanks for telling Judih to google his name. I read the story after you suggested googling. The poem becomes much more effective knowing the story. What a horrible incident. I cannot imagine what his parents must have gone through all those years.... and then when they finally found his remains. Powerful piece. Thanks for sharing it.

(Perhaps using his name instead of his initials in the title would be good :) )

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Post by sasha » September 6th, 2016, 4:35 pm

Children are sacred, and acts like this constitute sacrilege. It's bad enough for a parent to lose a child to natural or accidental means, but this act of monstrosity goes beyond simple crime. Thank you for posting this - it hits this particular parent's heart dead on.
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Re: Existence (for the soul of JW)

Post by 68degrees » September 6th, 2016, 8:46 pm

Doreen Peri wrote:Thanks for telling Judih to google his name. I read the story after you suggested googling. The poem becomes much more effective knowing the story. What a horrible incident. I cannot imagine what his parents must have gone through all those years.... and then when they finally found his remains. Powerful piece. Thanks for sharing it.

(Perhaps using his name instead of his initials in the title would be good :) )

Thanks, Doreen. Will indicate the full name...yes. Good idea.

The pervert went through the whole sad story in court today. There are no words to describe this kind of evil.

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Re: Existence (for the soul of JW)

Post by 68degrees » September 6th, 2016, 8:47 pm

sasha wrote:Children are sacred, and acts like this constitute sacrilege. It's bad enough for a parent to lose a child to natural or accidental means, but this act of monstrosity goes beyond simple crime. Thank you for posting this - it hits this particular parent's heart dead on.
Thanks for your thoughts here.

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Re: Existence

Post by saw » September 7th, 2016, 11:08 am

I've been reluctant to comment....i find it so disturbing I don't know what to say....but I have always felt, one aspect of poetry should be to speak about the unspeakable....not just poets, all artists....not saying it is the responsibility of each and every artist, but for some it is their calling ...to expose injustice and evil....whenever they can....'cause it takes a toll....

delicately handled.....thank you
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Re: Existence

Post by 68degrees » September 7th, 2016, 11:50 am

saw wrote:I've been reluctant to comment....i find it so disturbing I don't know what to say....but I have always felt, one aspect of poetry should be to speak about the unspeakable....not just poets, all artists....not saying it is the responsibility of each and every artist, but for some it is their calling ...to expose injustice and evil....whenever they can....'cause it takes a toll....

delicately handled.....thank you
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Re: Existence

Post by Doreen Peri » September 7th, 2016, 3:09 pm

Tour bus group snaps pic of 'J,' heart clouds for Jacob

http://www.kare11.com/news/tour-bus-gro ... /315174611

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Re: Existence

Post by 68degrees » September 7th, 2016, 8:24 pm

Doreen Peri wrote:Tour bus group snaps pic of 'J,' heart clouds for Jacob

http://www.kare11.com/news/tour-bus-gro ... /315174611

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Not sure about divine cloud formations, but I'm glad someone got a bit of comfort from this.

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Re: Existence

Post by Grinch » September 8th, 2016, 1:16 pm

Nice poem

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Re: Existence

Post by 68degrees » September 9th, 2016, 10:55 am

Just wanted folks to know how much I appreciated the comments.

"Existence" has been picked up by www.sleetmagazine.com (they had a call out for "minimalistic" poetry for their winter edition).

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