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you too eh ?

Posted: September 19th, 2016, 2:42 pm
by sweetwater
it seems the emotive blending of time
to fall asleep at the keyboard of my dreams
and stare endlessly into a screen

relating colour and line
if unless to confuse or more to refer
how one spends one time

what influences by which
i feel ... is good art
or great art

or at least the attempt of such
inclinations ...

the reader much like the viewer
finds themselves

looking at something
staring into

even to say ... reading
here on this line
my gentle and most intelligent
reader

you

...

of course to be unread
the much more stated virtue

...

or to read and realize
that the author or auteur

is maligned by the inability
to persuade the reader

and viewer

to enjoy the same virtues
vice or momentary

escape

from the absence of much
to say

and most reason to believe

one's senses

this the auteur has in sublime
control

the magnitude of such pretentious
glory

to say and say again

...

Re: you too eh ?

Posted: September 20th, 2016, 6:33 am
by dadio
Dream like, making sense at the time, but then it holds you hauntingly. 8)

Re: you too eh ?

Posted: September 20th, 2016, 2:06 pm
by theirishsea
Great first 3 lines at the beginning. Gets you into the poem right way.

I like the way the reader is addressed, thus removing the wall between author and reader.