Page 1 of 1

Ok, the dirt

Posted: September 18th, 2017, 12:06 am
by the mingo
Ok, the dirt is rambunctious, sure,
may I suggest you dine from my basket
while I knit icicles ?

every poem a decay unit
broken & bright all at once
erratic & wounded -

things do not depend on what we have done
and that is hilarious

Re: Ok, the dirt

Posted: September 18th, 2017, 9:32 pm
by Ann Bingham
I see ants and a picnic blanket. I feel the beat of a cold heart. I see lost and tattered love poems that once brought much happiness but then broke the heart of the one they were to. The last two lines. . .hummmmm. . .accusations unwarranted but believed just the same. But that is just my take. Interesting read. :)

Re: Ok, the dirt

Posted: September 18th, 2017, 11:57 pm
by the mingo
Thx, Ann - appreciate it - glad you got out of it what you did - it's just a construct of chance operations for me, a submarine of sorts in attempt of reaching or creating a bridge where things can cross -

Re: Ok, the dirt

Posted: September 19th, 2017, 9:34 am
by saw
superb !...just subtle enough ( unlike my default pounding of the head)....this is poetry

Re: Ok, the dirt

Posted: September 19th, 2017, 3:51 pm
by the mingo
( unlike my default pounding of the head). - cracked me up -thx, saw

Re: Ok, the dirt

Posted: September 20th, 2017, 4:19 am
by mnaz
Here's to decay!

Re: Ok, the dirt

Posted: September 20th, 2017, 7:32 am
by WIREMAN
....I just take it in and hope to cross that bridge 😎

Re: Ok, the dirt

Posted: September 20th, 2017, 9:26 pm
by the mingo
mnaz wrote: ↑
September 20th, 2017, 4:19 am
Here's to decay!
Thx mnaz - appreciate the read 8)

Re: Ok, the dirt

Posted: September 20th, 2017, 9:26 pm
by the mingo
WIREMAN wrote: ↑
September 20th, 2017, 7:32 am
....I just take it in and hope to cross that bridge 😎
Thx Wireman - appreciate it