thoughts tumble down
splat on the empty space of silence
they aren't square or cubed formulations
they don't gust with rhythmic sounds
my fault
my genetics my leaning my patience
are not up to corralling them into a pen
whipping the fat off them
they still stink with the less than ideal world
they wallow in
and they are unrestrained though pent up
they grunt
like me
at all the storms and clearings
and dandelions
Lyric of A Mixed Metaphor Maker
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Lyric of A Mixed Metaphor Maker
The Irish Sea Is Always In Turmoil, Even When Calm.
Re: Lyric of A Mixed Metaphor Maker
very visual
the hog metaphor seems right
the messiness of the sty vis a vis the messiness of putting thoughts together
in some cogent, neat, gussied up way
a little less stinky...more melodious
the first two lines are great and set the pace for what is to come... in a visceral way
the hog metaphor seems right
the messiness of the sty vis a vis the messiness of putting thoughts together
in some cogent, neat, gussied up way
a little less stinky...more melodious
the first two lines are great and set the pace for what is to come... in a visceral way
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading
you may end up where you are heading
Re: Lyric of A Mixed Metaphor Maker
Hell yes!theirishsea wrote: ↑May 10th, 2019, 7:13 amthoughts tumble down
splat on the empty space of silence
they aren't square or cubed formulations
they don't gust with rhythmic sounds
my fault
my genetics my leaning my patience
are not up to corralling them into a pen
whipping the fat off them
they still stink with the less than ideal world
they wallow in
and they are unrestrained though pent up
they grunt
like me
at all the storms and clearings
and dandelions
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