Color z

[creativesoul]

Clarity had wings of deep purple
The sun came out between the trees
In a moist lush green place
Where the river ends and the ocean begins

She waited there sometimes
For what seemed to be nature’s whispers
In the tropical breeze

She was just going a bit above the falls
Where she last saw her sister
Now etched in the rock by many years of flowing water
She died
Clarity had suffered some losses this year
Her vision was dim
Her emotions full of sugar and chocolate
She was going to the gym no matter what
Going to Los Angeles to see her family

[saw]

feels real
has an air of mystery but isn't pretentious

great start...."Clarity had wings of deep purple"

comes to the reader as snapshot in a genuine life

the title is also mysterious.....Color z

also liked, "her emotions full of sugar and chocolate"

[creativesoul]

Thank you saw I like it too