each bedouin moment

[wylde]

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smudgy doves flock like 
birds on the wire
leonard cohens voice
a host for the choir

each cord that rips a rent
through the vent
holds loves broken spine
with filled hollow intent

each bedouin moment
like camels calves cloves
dipped in the foils
of lance a lot toils

each cobbled word
a paved way of view
mindlessly mucking
those kneeled in the pew

.

[saw]

very skilled offering...has it all, wordplay, a message, unforced rhymes......rhyming is particularly tricky... i find many poets using words that are completely incongruous as long as they match the pitch....this also has great rhythm .....Flowwwwww

[mtmynd]

very skilled offering...has it all, wordplay, a message, unforced rhymes......rhyming is particularly tricky... i find many poets using words that are completely incongruous as long as they match the pitch....this also has great rhythm .....Flowwwwww

I fully agree with Steve on this one, wyled... a keeper for sure. you have fine rhythm going...

[judih]

if i could speak arabic, i'd read it to the bedouin herding their sheep throughout our zone. I'm sure they'd give it a thumbs up and offer you some fresh coffee.

[wylde]

saw; mtymynd & judih.

you all make my cup runneth over.

thank you for giving me a place & space to park my never mind.

as you feed me from feeling your own seeings in return.

☮☮

[Arcadia]

nomadic flow with metalic alliteration cuts, Borges would have also loved it! Bravo!!

[wylde]

thank you arcadia. phonics are my prime
choice in painting word pictures.

thank you sincerely for opening a new spirit for me to explore and absorb: