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smudgy doves flock like 
birds on the wire
leonard cohens voice
a host for the choir

each cord that rips a rent
through the vent
holds loves broken spine
with filled hollow intent

each bedouin moment
like camels calves cloves
dipped in the foils
of lance a lot toils

each cobbled word
a paved way of view
mindlessly mucking
those kneeled in the pew

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very skilled offering...has it all, wordplay, a message, unforced rhymes......rhyming is particularly tricky... i find many poets using words that are completely incongruous as long as they match the pitch....this also has great rhythm .....Flowwwwww

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February 28th, 2020, 11:50 am

very skilled offering...has it all, wordplay, a message, unforced rhymes......rhyming is particularly tricky... i find many poets using words that are completely incongruous as long as they match the pitch....this also has great rhythm .....Flowwwwww

I fully agree with Steve on this one, wyled... a keeper for sure. you have fine rhythm going...

if i could speak arabic, i'd read it to the bedouin herding their sheep throughout our zone. I'm sure they'd give it a thumbs up and offer you some fresh coffee.

saw; mtymynd & judih.

you all make my cup runneth over.

thank you for giving me a place & space to park my never mind.

as you feed me from feeling your own seeings in return.

nomadic flow with metalic alliteration cuts, Borges would have also loved it! Bravo!!

thank you arcadia. phonics are my prime
choice in painting word pictures.

thank you sincerely for opening a new spirit for me to explore and absorb: