Cigarettes and Loose Change

[edsiejka]

Cigarettes and Loose Change
by Edmund Siejka


On a late afternoon
There was a stillness
When nothing seemed to move.

Listless and sort of down
I knew a bar
Squeezed in between non- descript buildings.

Hesitating I stood outside
Searching the gray lifeless windows
When the bar’s neon light
Beckoned.

Behind the dark oak bar
She was taking inventory
Fingers lightly
Touching each bottle of
Bottom shelf
Bar brands
Behind me on the walls
Were photos of the old time fighters
From the time before I was born

I ordered the house Bourbon
Grimacing, I felt it burning down.
Then I asked
Last time we spoke
You said you might be heading out?
I was she said
Still leaving?
She answered,
Maybe.
It could be any day now.

I quietly sipped my drink
At the far end of the bar
Shadows moved
Narrow eyes
Pretending not to see.

Leaning forward she whispered
The owner lets them
Hang out in the back
Smoking cigarettes and carrying on
They’re OK
But take my advice
Don’t leave any loose change on the bar.

Staring into her eyes
I found himself
Wishing that I knew more of her
There was something about the way she moved
That made me forget where I was.

Soon, I only had
A few crumpled bills
Left in my jeans
Leaving a tip on the bar
I pushed my stool back
The scraping sound
Made her turn around
Her hazel eyes meeting mine
And for a solitary heart beat
We were one.

Suddenly there was the sound of broken glass
Angrily she went to the back
Alone, I knew the moment
We had
Was somehow taken away from me
And I didn’t have the courage
To convince a pretty girl to stay.

[sasha]

there's something wonderfully cinematic about this, something I've felt from much or your other work. It would work as a short story or a film as well as it does as a poem. Bravo!

[Doreen Peri]

Yeah… I agree with Sasha. Visually and emotively cinematic. I saw it happening. Good writing, Ed!

[saw]

the emotion comes across convincingly......poetically......nice piece

[mnaz]

Nice story poem, well told.

[creativesoul]

I could feel the burning going down
The question in the air