Gone

[faithmairee]

prove me right
or prove me wrong
it will not matter
once i'm gone

prove me weak
or prove me strong
don't wait to love me
'till i'm gone

[iblieve]

I loved this poem, said so much my friend. You need to bring this one to darc.
http://akashanetweb.com/darc/index.php

"C"

[joel]

I think the meter in this piece lends it both a good rhythm and a natural flow. I like your use of few words to express larger thoughts--simple and open-ended.

One editorial comment on the last line:
I'm all about poetic lisence, so disregard this at will.
In the rules world, I believe

until=till='til

Technically the apostrophe before a double-l "till" (e.g. " 'till i'm gone ") is unneccesary. But that's just rules.

-joel

[faithmairee]

i appreciate both of your kind words...thank you for taking the time to both read and respnd to my work

faithmairee

[iblieve]

LMAO poetic license means rules are meant to be broken and DARC is dedicated to breaking every rule in the book as long the message is unadulterated. "C"

Love Ya Joel but leave the rule book at home, J/K