Studio8 - Uniting the Arts

Wordless and dynamic verse
wastes anorexic but so fluidly
when poured from height and depth and
width to
water, spelled rather than experienced; and
whatever experiential moment passed,
we lost it as our hands let go—<center>
wiping
vulgar feelings
from our touch; not teardrops,
not unconscious sweet remembrance,
but the foulest wasted tastes of loving:
gluttony’s but faithful outcome
less than honored, less than
lovely is our
wiping.</center>
Without transcendence or abstraction
weighs the sun’s bright invert shadow;
ways of bartering perspective
weak and
wily seduce me to
wonder lonesome thickets of poetic leaves,
wary every line leads anorexic false.

My god how you weave those words together leading me into poetic heaven. You need to come to darc and check us out, we love new talented poets with a mind of their own just be warned, we break all the rules in the name of poetic license, lmao. "C"

http://akashanetweb.com/darc/index.php

Seriously though your muse is a mother fucker, I love it iblieve

love all the W's

joel, your artistry with words is deliberate and so surely i can see you care about technique, structure, metaphor, imagery... all the tools of the trade...

this piece is no exception...

i will come back to read again because i know there are layers i've missed on the first read...

"wary every line leads anorexic false" - nice!

"when poured from height and depth and
width to
water, spelled rather than experienced" - excellent!

"ways of bartering perspective
weak and
wily seduce me to
wonder lonesome thickets of poetic leaves" - really fine lines, joel... thank you!

Thanks for the kind words.

I was just having fun combining forms...and thanks, Doreen, for the Rictameter. The first and last stanza are modified Pleiades (I found the form on some poety website I no longer can think of...but I believe the Pleiades was described as such:

1. titled poems (I think a one word title)
2. seven lines per poem (not including the title)
3. each of the seven lines begins with the same letter as the title.

Well, I thought they might be fun together. Rather than titling, I just used the first and last word of the Rictameter as the 'title'. Anyhow, I need a (more exciting) life (but I really don't believe that).

Again, thanks for the kind words.