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I Don't Belong here (senryu)
Posted: October 28th, 2005, 2:14 pm
by Dixie
It's obvious now.
Should have listened to myself
from the very start.
Posted: October 28th, 2005, 2:41 pm
by Doreen Peri
Yes you do.
(But I'm sure you're not talking about *here*, meaning right here, but yeah, you belong lotsa places.)
I've felt this way before and you stated it quite clearly ... I know this feeling. Well done!
Question... I counted the syllables and it's 5-7-5 like they teach the standard haiku.
What makes this a senryu?
I'm familiar with the term but I never really studied the format. What's the difference between haiku and senryu?
Looking forward to your answer.
Tanka very much.
Posted: October 29th, 2005, 4:28 am
by mnaz
in the studio
to riff another verse
we return
(I think senryu is haiku with a human reference.... am I right?)
Posted: October 29th, 2005, 8:53 am
by Dixie
a senryu is a 3-line unrhymed Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku but treating human nature usually in an ironic or satiric vein
thanks Doreen and mnaz
it's just funny because I don't know where I belong anymore...sigh
Posted: October 29th, 2005, 10:37 am
by mtmynd
as i'm reading this
i wonder if it is true...
belonging is life
Posted: October 29th, 2005, 11:45 am
by WIREMAN
the big dog
moans for it's
master, she
has gone to
the market.......
Posted: November 1st, 2005, 9:26 am
by ~K
What is obvious
is merely surface bullshit
you shoud know better
Posted: November 1st, 2005, 10:19 am
by gypsyjoker
surface bullshit
the moon in the water
is life fair
anniefay's hair