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{muffled outburst}

Posted: March 12th, 2006, 7:25 am
by ~K
Did you hear me?

No?

I didn't think so.

You are
still here,

and I can
not escape
this conversation
no matter
how one sided
it is.

I am transfixed,
in spite
of myself,
I will stay
here too &
shout at no one.

Posted: March 12th, 2006, 7:58 am
by Dave The Dov
In life we hear you scream. But what will happen if someone cares????
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Mercedes Benz Atego

Posted: March 12th, 2006, 8:14 am
by ~K
add tears

Posted: March 12th, 2006, 8:44 am
by Dave The Dov
Could anything else be added as well????
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og kush plant

Posted: March 12th, 2006, 8:58 am
by ~K
too much scrutiny
a long goodbye
& jackpots
inserted
randomly

Posted: March 12th, 2006, 9:07 am
by Dave The Dov
Came up a winner some how!!!!
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Honda 70

Posted: April 9th, 2006, 3:13 am
by muted
how small
you must feel

to shout out
at the vast
of nothingness

to cry out
in vain
or vanity

how small
must I feel

clinging to
every sound
faint from distance

to reach out
in vain
or vanity

how small
this world is

to hold mute
to the crying
begging needs

of two drifting souls...

transfixed.

Posted: April 10th, 2006, 10:59 am
by dolphin girl
"...I will stay
here too &
shout at no one."

Intense as always ~K

love lots

Posted: April 10th, 2006, 3:38 pm
by ALundwall
intense!

of course i heard you and i am sure (since we are all little voyeurs) others did too...

~K lovely work...lovely work as always...as always lovely work ~K...as always ~K such lovely work...such lovely ~K work it is so lovely...oh come on over here and hold me ;)

andrew

Posted: April 19th, 2006, 12:17 pm
by joel
~K wrote:too much scrutiny
a long goodbye
& jackpots
inserted
randomly
O ~K, I applaud the gamble hope of jackpot earnings. Isn't it so draining, though, to shrink back into the quiet and watch the odds stack up against you, knowing that there's still the 50/50 chance of winning on the simple level of 'either i win or i lose'?

Who says R&G are dead?

Posted: April 21st, 2006, 7:43 am
by lenny
Sentiment well conveyed. I wonder if different line breaks could add to the intensity. It is only my opinion so please don't be upset with me but I believe each line should be able to carry itself - its own expression of something specific, and think some of yours could be blended. All in all a very intense write. Thank you for sharing.

lenny