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Homogeny

Posted: May 17th, 2006, 1:57 pm
by mousey1
Homogeny


Creamed

but the best part of me
hardly drew a glare

unnoticed - almost worse -

If I take a line a simple line a hand drawn line and go on sail on without a
break or space will it eventually lead
to you?

but who then

will dot my i

cross my t

Homogeny thirsts

for the new way

the new line

the new game

not the tired line the tried and true line

Homogeny thirsts

pucker up

drink

cold

thirst

Posted: May 17th, 2006, 2:01 pm
by mousey1
I have a scientific regard for the nothingness of being me

I studied diligently the

arrogant course someone

set for me

compounded it

immaculated it

If I speak

in the riddle of a rhyme

set worlds on end

for the cost of time

I am no better

than I thought I'd be

Hypocrite

Gasper at insult

Eater of lines

Posted: May 18th, 2006, 2:11 pm
by iblieve
I am an eater of lines too, and I ate yours right up. Creamed---I loved that opening because it can mean different things. I hope you got your I's dotted and it was ecstacy. great poem my friend so quit nibbling that creamy cheese and write some more, lmao. "C"

Posted: May 18th, 2006, 7:08 pm
by Ann Bingham
creamed as if a lose in a game. the best part going unnoticed. If I were to change would you notice me then. Just thoughts on the first part. Now the second part The first part of it seemed to be a study in how to get someone to notice (I'm taking into context the first post) and finding it is not working. No matter what I do nothing works. Or is it that I am being untrue to myself and therefore am a hypocrite. Just thoughts.

love lots

Posted: May 18th, 2006, 9:22 pm
by joel
iblieve wrote:Creamed---I loved that opening because it can mean different things. I hope you got your I's dotted and it was ecstacy.
Great poetry yourself, iblieve:


Creamed--

I love that
opening

be
cause it can

mean
different
things. I hope you got your


[eyes] crossed
tease dotted

and it was exstacy
.